Is this one good

Well i just want to know if this good???

As i enter my house i slam the door behind me
i had a bad day,to to it off my mom was not home
she never is home
filling depressed i walk through the house up to my room i get a box from underneath my bed with suicidal thoughts going through my head
i get up go to the window and take my box.
i get the blade i make a slit on my wrist
looking down at the blood makes me feel better
i make it deeper and now I'm shaking i want to cry
no tears would come when i see the blood i feel sleepy then i start feel dizzy i look around me when ever thing stops my time had ended, my mom
has come home calling my name without a sound
she starts to wonder
she runs up to my room stops and stares
A shocked look on her face
she couldn't believe what i have done
As a tear falls from her face
she tumble to the floor
and she wonder why
she get the blade and ask what did i do wrong?
with one blink she put the blade to her wrist and
say goodbye
then my brother comes home he knows something not right. me and mom are nowhere in site
he goes up stairs the door is open
There he stood to see there mother and me
laying on the floor he looks around and sees the blood stained carpet
He starts to cry he get the phone and dials 911
He explained what he had found when the caps come and the ambulance behind them take mother and me away
ever one watching they were devastated
the next day friends and family are the willow tree
Mourning
their deaths
their mother and me
rest in PEACE

Written by
Jessica Pesco
&
Amber McDonald