I NEED ADVICE READ THIS PLEASE

alright i dont think im all that good at writing poems so here's one of my tell me what cha think THANKS

She’s a skin art junkie all cute and petite,
all her fat cat schemes don’t you look around,
don’t you even blame me.
It’s a real bad thing to spill your shades
for a blind man to find them,
you can feel the whole earth move and don’t even mind it.

I want to know you, better than I do,
relieve me from myself, bring me into you.
I want to know you, better than I do,
relieve me, relieve me. Bring me, bring me into you.

She’s a “wanna be” hero and she’s trying to be strong,
at the end of the hour you find out the tower
ain’t standing so tall.
It’s a real hard thing to show your weakness,

if anyone can love you I know my King can
Your holiness, your kingdom,
your righteousness, my freedom
She’s an easy scare, she’s a simple bluff,
she’s a timid girl, she’s in love.

alright will someone please tell me what you think?? seriously
will someone please read this???