Need some help please

I have a lot of poems that have low ratings for one reason or another. I have gane back through them a fixed them up a bit. Not I need you guys to read, rate and comment on them so that I will know if I made the right changes.

Please r/r/c any of my poems that are rated 4.5 or lower. I will return the favor +2

Rules: 1. you have to rate the peom or you'll get nothing in return.
2. Leave a comment that is in depth
3. comment has to be more then 2 sentence long.

Thanks a head of time. :)

Okay , i'll do a couple . Please do Acheing Memories and anything else .

I posted some new poems can some one read and review please so far everones favorite was end of days

You do not post things you want everyone to do in someone elses topic you have to make your own.