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alright i dont think im all that good at writing poems so here's one of my tell me what cha think THANKS

She’s a skin art junkie all cute and petite,
all her fat cat schemes don’t you look around,
don’t you even blame me.
It’s a real bad thing to spill your shades
for a blind man to find them,
you can feel the whole earth move and don’t even mind it.

I want to know you, better than I do,
relieve me from myself, bring me into you.

She’s a “wanna be” hero and she’s trying to be strong,
at the end of the hour you find out the tower
ain’t standing so tall.
It’s a real hard thing to show your weakness,

if anyone can love you I know my King can
Your holiness, your kingdom,
your righteousness, my freedom
She’s an easy scare, she’s a simple bluff,
she’s a timid girl, she’s in love

I find it very mind picking it pulls you in and makes oyu wonder if it has hidden meaning but a very good poem indeed The one part i dont liek is that repaeting of the two lines but thats always writeers choice and flavor I love how you conveyed certain points the comparisons are great

~plz return the favor~

hey thanks alot!!