In need of a favor

Hey could u guys please take a look at my poems and tell me things that i need to change please i really want to improve on my writing skills. thanks. i will return the favor

hey why do you want us too tell you how to write i think you should write how you want to write not how any of us think you should...

what i want is suggestions on improving them. i dont want sum one dictating me u have to write this here and that there. i mean i jus want sum one to give me suggestions to make my poems better give me ideas for rhyeme schemes things like that...