A tiny grammar problrm..help plz..

  • BlackIris
    15 years ago

    What should I write?
    With eyes mucked by dust
    or
    With eyes mucked with dust
    or
    With eyes mucked in dust??
    Thank you :)

  • BlackIris
    15 years ago

    This is my poem, so what is appropriate to use?

    Don't be scared
    I'm not here to rip what's left in your weary soul
    Here, take my hand "love", I'll never let you fall
    Let me cure this heart and wipe these tears of pain
    Everything is gonna be alright "love", you don't have to explain
    I forgive you
    You were deceived by all that money and gold
    So blinded to see my love with eyes mucked in dust
    And when the wind blew you felt so lost and cold
    You couldn't find peace when you had nobody to trust
    But "love", I forgive you for you didn't believe in me
    I forgive you for you sought a better man
    And I'm sorry for I didn't catch you when you ran
    I just knew that you would come back to me
    I need you for what you are
    "Love", you're my shining star and I'm just......
    Your lover-man

  • BlackIris
    15 years ago

    Thank you for the advice, I appreciate it..
    And to be honest I'm not a poet! :) I just try to write something..and yes I've noticed that it's full of I's, I will work on it.. thank you again..

  • BlackIris
    15 years ago

    Thanx 4 the nice words.. :)
    Yeah, everything has a start..it's like a seed..

  • sibyllene
    15 years ago

    I would use "with," though "by" works ok too.