Song Title Contest With A Difference

  • xToBeWithYoux
    15 years ago

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    Dun dun dun! The results!!!

    I'd just like to say, thank you to ALL who took part, this has been a lot of fun to host and incredibly hard to judge! I wanted all the poems to win! But there has to be placings, and these are...

    FIRST PLACE: MYxWORDSxMYxSOUL (Teenage Romance) - Endlessly
    SECOND PLACE: Dollwithafrown - City Of Delusion
    THIRD PLACE: Dark Delirium - Hysteria

    And an HONOURABLE MENTION goes to: tetrisxxkrista (LifesALovePoem) - Starlight

    Well done everybody, PM me your poems you want commenting! I will try to comment on these soon, but its exam season!!

    PRIZES:
    1st place - 7 in depth comments and a place on my favourites list.
    2nd place - 5 in depth comments
    3rd place - 3 in depth comments
    Honourable mention - 1 in depth comment

  • NyellMoonlight
    15 years ago

    Muscle Museum & Hysteria

  • dollwithafrown
    15 years ago

    Could I please have "Hate This and I'll Love You" and "City of Delusion"?

    Thanks. ^__^

  • Kimberley
    15 years ago

    Unintended please. By the way love the idea for a contest. I for one love muse so... yeah.

  • Kimberley
    15 years ago

    Unintended. I'm a girl but I made the poem seem from the point of view of a guy since the song is.

    Wait while I regain my liveliness
    Because I think we can be more then this
    Who would have thought that while I was healing
    You'd come along and give me back these feelings
    You could be my unintended love
    The one I'm always thinking of
    You could be my unintended cure
    Of the things done to me by her
    You could be the reason I live on
    Now that my old life is dead and gone
    You could be the one who listens to me
    My heart is locked up, you could be the key
    You could be my unintended queen
    We could feel so secure and serene
    You could be my unintended love
    The one I'm always thinking of

    Also please reserve endlessly.

    ~KM~

  • Kimberley
    15 years ago

    Endlessly.

    Out of my control, the way I love you
    Doesn't matter what you say or do
    I'll love you forever, endlessly
    You don't know everything about me
    but that doesn't make me less inclined
    To try to keep you in my heart, on my mind
    I promise I will answer your every call
    I'll always catch you if you should fall
    For the life of me I couldn't let you go
    How much I love you, you'll never really know
    Endlessly, I'll stay by you
    Endlessly, I'll help you get through
    I would walk thousands of miles
    Just to see one of your loving smiles
    I won't ever let you down
    I'll hold you up even if it means I drown
    Endlessly, I'll stay by you
    Endlessly, I'll help you get through
    Endlessly, yes endlessly, I'll love you

    ~KM~

  • BREEawNUHH
    15 years ago

    "Unintended". :D

  • BREEawNUHH
    15 years ago

    Note: The way I understood the song was.. the 'unintended' love, must have been something he didn't expect, because the definition of "unintended" is "results were not planned to happen, although they happened", so I kind of wrote it like that-ish. :P Also, not sure if this is considered any kind of 'form', because while some forms may include something like this, most require more; the last stanza is the first stanza, but the lines are opposite. :)

    Darling, don't fret; for I will be on my way soon,
    I'm picking up the pieces of my life before you.
    Wait for me to hop on the train that'll take me,
    to the love I never expected, my unintended.

    So much is shattered on her hardwood floor,
    I left to retrieve it all for you, my unintended.
    You won't get the fractured pieces of my past,
    I'm putting them together so I can be whole.

    Don't lose faith in me, just believe, my unintended,
    that I will be by your side as soon as possible.
    You won't get a portion; you'll get one-hundred percent,
    but I need to glue the pieces of my past together.

    The love I never expected, my unintended,
    wait for me to hop on the train back to you.
    I'm picking up the pieces of my life before you,
    darling, don't fret; for I will be on my way soon.

    Briana Coulter
    03.09.09

  • Jenni Marie
    15 years ago

    Take a bow, please

  • Krista
    15 years ago

    Starlight please.

  • Krista
    15 years ago

    Starlight

    Was it all worth it,
    the pain and trials?
    Never been rejected,
    until I met you.

    I'm not letting go,
    I refuse to drop you.
    You're staying in minds,
    hopes and expectations.

    Feel your warm skin,
    wrapped around my own.
    The seas taking me out,
    boats sinking beneath me.

    Black holes and revelations,
    soaring through dismal space.
    Emptiness and quiet despair,
    keep on wishing for you.

  • dollwithafrown
    15 years ago

    Hate This and I'll Love You
    by dollwithafrown

    Broken record, hear it play,
    Set me up for another shattered day.
    Eyes heavy, stones line each lash,
    Lay me down and avoid the crash.

    Wave your hand, set off and go,
    The end is something you need to know.
    You can't stick me in your bubble cage
    And hope love grows with passing age.

    Ride with the shore, slip off to sea,
    No longer your lover; no longer me.
    Break the relationship, I no longer care
    As I walk away, death scenting the air.

  • dollwithafrown
    15 years ago

    City of Delusion
    by dollwithafrown

    Coat me with your lies,
    Feeding words into my soul,
    But listen clearly as I say:
    The truth does not grow old.
    [your city of delusion
    will not beat me
    my heart and my own eyes
    are what i use to see]

    Rest your arms, empty your mind;
    A need for belief, so very unkind.
    Our rights: pushed into the ground;
    Slapped for making a thread of sound.
    [your city of delusion
    will not beat me
    my heart and my own eyes
    are what i use to see]

    ---

    The lyrics to this song can be rather confusing, so I'm not altogether sure on whether or not my interpretation was correct. However, I got the feeling that the song was taking a political and even possibly a religious standpoint, and therefore I went with that theme.

  • Twisted Heart
    15 years ago

    Sober, Please and thanx

  • Twisted Heart
    15 years ago

    Sober
    By: Twisted Heart

    The lights are hot above me
    The liquor flows like streams
    There's music to intoxicate
    Fills me full of dreams
    I've left my heart upon the shelf
    No pain with me tonight
    I'll sip another slow gin fizz
    Until I'm feeling light
    The dancing sways me slower
    As arms reach out to me
    Another drink I'm almost there
    Thoughts tempered to be free
    My eyes are getting heavy
    I feel I've reached my peak
    But another drink's waiting
    To come and rescue me
    Now thoughts of you are dying
    My memory unclear
    Was it only yesterday
    When you left me here
    Yes, one more drink should do it
    A heartache to get over
    Drinks cure the pain I feel tonight
    But tomorrow...

    I will be sober

  • HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG
    15 years ago

    Can I reserve:

    Starlight,
    City of Delusion

    Please and thanks :)

  • NeferNoir
    15 years ago

    Hysteria & Endlessly

  • NyellMoonlight
    15 years ago

    Sorry, I have to unreserve my titles, I won't be able to write those in time.

  • xToBeWithYoux
    15 years ago

    NyellMoonlight, that's absolutely fine :)

    Keep up the stuff guys! This is going to be hard to judge!

  • Jenni Marie
    15 years ago

    Take A Bow

    Guess you never figured that I'd find out
    About the countless times you strayed
    Leaving me with only tears for comfort
    Feeling so lonely hurt and betrayed

    Should have won a thousnad oscars
    For everything you said was just an act
    But you're going to have a surprise
    If you think I'll lower myself and react

    Managed to hide it for so long
    Should have realized when we grew apart
    Constant occurence of tears on my face
    Became your favourite form of art

    Only, refuse to cry for you any longer
    Deserve better, know this without a doubt
    So why don't you do us both a favour
    Find another to believe your lies and get out

    Used to think we'd always be together
    You were the only one that I desired
    Now your fantasy world has crashed down
    Been discovered you're just a cheat and liar

  • xToBeWithYoux
    15 years ago

    For those still reserved, you have two weeks left, which is plenty enough time!

    And for any one that wants to reserve, you still have time :)

  • NeferNoir
    15 years ago

    Hysteria

    Writhing with desire,
    deriding control.
    Night and day,
    makes no difference.
    Losing.
    Blase.

    Tempting risks,
    with a mindless oddity.
    Taking it down,
    with my desperation.
    Threatened.
    Exasperated.

    It binds me,
    tight and illusive.
    Cruel screams,
    tearing me out.
    Bounded.
    Escaped.

    Eyes of madness,
    deplores insomnia.
    Feeding a mania,
    I will not sleep.
    Fluent.
    Refused.

    Craving for a requital to salvage my selfish prurience,
    longing for absolute victory in a myriad of dementia.
    I have caved in.
    Hysteria.

  • xToBeWithYoux
    15 years ago

    2 days left people!! I might not officially close on Wednesday, leaving people time to finish poems, but it will be closed by the weekend, so be warned!

    ...

    2 DAYS! XD

  • NeferNoir
    15 years ago

    Endlessly

    Tie your dreams with me,
    deplore my hope.
    Sweet memories,
    deficit infinity.
    Abhorred.
    Depleted.

    Your silence,
    smothered me.
    Fervid moments,
    idled with you.
    Hectic.
    Suffocated.

    Cherish these,
    it's not forever.
    Sacrificing,
    my life for yours.
    Treasured.
    Waived.

    Time withers,
    but I linger.
    I shall not surrender,
    wait enduringly.
    Constricted.
    Abided.

    No words could decipher the intense mortality of my affections,
    I have kept this within the iris of my misanthropic secrecy.
    I will remain.
    Endlessly.

  • xToBeWithYoux
    15 years ago

    CLOSED!!

    If you haven't posted your poem yet, sorry but I'm judging now, no late entries accepted.

    Results up some time next week!

  • xToBeWithYoux
    15 years ago

    Dun dun dun! The results!!!

    I'd just like to say, thank you to ALL who took part, this has been a lot of fun to host and incredibly hard to judge! I wanted all the poems to win! But there has to be placings, and these are...

    FIRST PLACE: MYxWORDSxMYxSOUL (Teenage Romance) - Endlessly
    SECOND PLACE: Dollwithafrown - City Of Delusion
    THIRD PLACE: Dark Delirium - Hysteria

    And an HONOURABLE MENTION goes to: tetrisxxkrista (LifesALovePoem) - Starlight

    Well done everybody, PM me your poems you want commenting! I will try to comment soon, but its exam season!! :D

  • Krista
    15 years ago

    Yay thanks for the honorable mention! That's better than nothing at all.
    If you could comment Landlocked, that'd be great.
    Thanks again!

  • dollwithafrown
    15 years ago

    Ooh, I'm a tad bit late and only just saw that you placed me second. Thank you so much! :)

    Congrats to everybody else, too.

    I will PM you my poems shortly.