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I recently wrote a poem and want a few opinions.

Death in the End

Is the title of the poem I would like for you to read and comment. In return I will read and comment on two of your poems.

P.S. Please write more then one sentence, for whatever you give me I will give you back.

Done. :)

Just do any two of mine that catch your eye, please.

Done

Detonating Silence &
Staying to leave plz

Thx in Advance;)