Formed Poetry Challenge #5

For those of you who have survived Darren's last challenging challenge here is the next one...

The Tetractys

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/tetractys.html

This is one I wrote in 2007. As you can see I opted for the easier option of 5 lines haha!!

Walk
backwards
re-tracing
my own footsteps
changing's life's mistakes as I go along.

how
ever
am I to
run to the sun
trailing the tatters of my broken heart?
breathe in the light, the agony won't last -
run with the wind -
ever like
a bright
kite

^
This acrostic version needs tweaking. Any ideas?

Sorry...my brain is still numb from Darren's challenge. Why do you think I posted this one before he got in first?...why do you think my example is more than 10 years old? My brain is fried and will forever be diamante shaped lol!!

I refuse to believe your brain is fried. In fact, I believe yours is in tip top condition. Anyway, diamanté shaped, is not far off 'brain shape' is it?

Nah...you know when you crack an egg in the frying pan and it just forms it own shape with wobbly ends that crisp up...that's my brain right now :)

BTW..how did you add that little accent above the 'e' in diamante...do you have a french computer as well as an organic computer or what???

Ah ha! here we go again with another challenge, feeling a silly state of mind today so here is my effort based on the information provided.

Good ones so far :)

"Who knows"

Here
we are
all part of
the human race
I wonder if there is a finish line
left wondering whatever will be next
a place in the
finale
after
life

That's really good Michael...I like it a lot :)

You are both putting me to shame here and I feel rather naked with my little 5 liner LOL!

my laptop, recognised the French word and suggested the accent. Who am I to say, non?

Love these so far! :-) here's mine ...

Knowing You (double tetractys)

I
Know you
Know that I
Know that you know
That I know you know that I know of that
So don't pretend you don't know that I know
That you know I
Know you know
That I
Know.

Reminds me of the episode of friends where everyone finds out Chandler and Monica are dating. "They don't know we know you know that we know you know... And you'd better not tell them!"

Joey, "I couldn't if I wanted to!"

very funny kitty - yours inspired this - just take notice, will you?

if
noticed
this notice
isn't worth the
paper the notice is written onto
so noticing this notice of notice
is not really
a noticed
noticed
eh?

My pan fried eggs are now scrambled!!!

and...one egg is un oeuf...

my effort

my notepad:

I
wrote life
scribbled dreams
caught every whim
semiautobiographical

Hahahaha Tony! Yes! I know it well (I know every episode really well - lol) :-)

lol ... that's really funny Michael :-) x

Darren ... love yours - but - I counted and recounted and 'semiautobiographical' is only 9 syllables? x

thanks but check this out

http://www.yougowords.com/10-syllables

(I double checked)

**edit
personally I think it has 9 as well, maybe we are pronouncing it wrong

well that's at least three of us that think it's 9 Darren ... methinks that website is wrong! lol ... it's still jolly good though

... I just had a look at the comments on that page at the website got loads wrong! Debate though ... is 'fire' one syllable or two? I think it's two?

depends on your accent.

if it's pronounced fy-yah then 2.

I pronounce it “fi-yer” (2) and think the word up for debate is 9 syllables ;)

I was just making conversation based on the syllable counting website that Darren directed us to. There's loads of words on there with miscounted syllables ... :-)

When I say Fire it sounds like just one syllable so I looked on a few sites who said it has two and then I found this one...

http://www.learnersdictionary.com/qa/fire-one-syllable-or-two

I also fight with myself over the word diamond...most sites say it has three syllables but I've yet to find anyone who says di-a-mond?

I agree Hellon ... I think there's a huge difference between how we're meant to pronounce a word, and how we actually pronounce it! Obviously accents change the game too! :-)

ps ... I'm a 2-syllable 'diamond' girl too!

Choc-o-late, or choc-late?

I would say -
choc-o-late Tony

choc-late for me ... unless I'm singing the funny fruit & nut choc-0-late song :-) :-)
and you?

Dr Cox on Scrubs could make fire multiple syllables

Fi-i-i-i-er

Prehistoric Veldt (Double Tetractys)

Scared
looking
all ways clear
tentative steps
then races out to the green open field
snatches a leg quarter from the carcass
dashes away
to safety
and feeds
mate.

Love Dr Cox :)

Are we done here? Would anyone like another challenge or are you all a bit fed-up now?

Has this site ever come up with its own form? I know of Larry's, but as a site, could we design one?
We could vote on the necessary elements. The highest voted elements win and get written into the form. Once a named,
then the fun starts...

How about a haibun next

Fed up?

No chance

Michael...I'm not sure how that would work, there are so many members with different views/opinions but...I'm open to suggestion???

Darren...Haibun was the very first poem I ever attempted. It wasn't perfect but I'm still kinda proud that I started off in the 'medium' level of poetry without realizing it :)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haibun

Do we need a new thread??? Can you start it please if you think so???

EDIT

Reading through the description I feel that it may put some members off so let me tell you how it was described to me...class it as a diary...the focus of your attention (in my case a tree) changes daily/from season to season etc so take note in your dairy (the prose part) and form a haiku from each prose. This may take you a while to write so, if you like I can fry your brains some more and have an 'in between challenge'..no pressure folks...just saying like....