I CANT FINISH THIS

yes post it..its sounds good but yet...reflects the reality of war which in my own opinion is a bad thing....war that is

Patience is everything..
Never rush on writing a poem.
I think this one is good.
POST IT!
okies..cookies..
;)

blazing field
bodies drop
one by one they fall
bred to kill
not to care
sin with no more remorse
time is quickly
ticking down
soon you'll lose it all
pawn of war
is all you are
theres no other cause
you will die
for your pride
dont try to hide
you dont have a say
load your gun
fire on
till your life is claimed
you sold yourself
now prove your worth
protect your country
protect your freedom
fight with all your might
dont give up
you lasted this long
maybe you'll live after all
weezing by
bullets everywhere
gunfire and screams
is all you hear
fight with all your might

thats just my advice on how it show go on, what do you think?