THE KING HAS ARRIVED!!!

1) rofl JPM
2) This is the wrong place to announce your arrival
3) This is the wrong place to ask for people to read your stuff.
4) Don't talk in all caps.
5) ...[insert witty retort here]

~Ciao Lipton

who announced you were king?

Well apparently you wanted your poetry read. So here is what I have to say about it.

This is one of those "cheesy" love poems.

The flow sucks on lines 1, 2, 4, 5, 9, 10, 13, 14, 17, 18, 28, and 29 (I counted lines as every time you pressed enter). In lines 10, and 11 you left an empty triplet. Same with 12, 13, 14, and 15. "Inside" does not rhyme with "goodbye." In lines 17-26 you complete denounced your rhyme scheme. You used the word heart five times, not to mention four of them were within four lines. Lines 4, and 5 are so forced I wanted to puke (and I would have made less effort puking than you did making these lines up).

Tips:

1) Buy a thesaurus
2) Use the thesaurus
3) Try a more simple rhyme scheme (obviously aaa, bbb, ccc was too complicated for you)
4) Don't write a love poem again until you have read a complete version of Webster's Dictionary

Happy writing

Poem's name was: "Follow Your Heart"

(Very original by the way. I'm sure no one has ever thought of that)

Well said above...

Welcome Mr I think Im King - clearly you're not tho as I am the Queen and you far from stand by my side LoL

JPM - Too funny :OD

king kong ? that u mate ?

lol

lmao omg Thank God for JPM to add humor to a post like this!!

lol

Think of the positive. At least we have one more poet we know will never be plagiarized.

hey king LOL
pls read and comment on my poems and ill do the same xxxxxxx