I need some help...

Could someone please tell me what they think on my poem "Broken Girl" and on "UNTITLED~INCOMPLETE" On the incomplete one, I don't know if I should stop where it is, or if it's missing something...anyone wanna help please? All comments returned.
Thanks!~xunseentearsx

Please comment and vote on these poems

Unbreakable Secret
Protector Of The Two Towers

thanx

I will and could you please rate and comment on these:
Another Broken Promise
In Memory...

Please and thank you! Much love,
Haily
xoxoxoxoxo