If any of you are bored and have nothing better to do, could you

Could you just go read some of my poems and comment/rate them? It's not often I get comments... Thank you! ^_______________^

Now, youre asking for comments, so please dont yell at me, youre asking for critique. you have a knack for words, and could become quite a fine poet or writer, ill tell you this. But you need to grow up, and really start to explore yourself if you wanna become respectable at this. People dont often comment because youre stuff is completely unnattainable. I couldnt really relate at all. Even suicidal tendencies are hard pressed to be described in the line "decapitated by the sword under my bed" or something similar. Usually, literal usage of the word decapitation in any of its forms, is a sure no-no. But, i repeat, youre poems have merit, you naturally have a very good writing instinct, there is a very subtle flow to everything, that makes it somewhat enjoyable. But as of now, youre poetry is somewhat more suited to a resident evil game publication, or perhaps even some good natured D&D. Start writing about what youre going through, hell, get pissed of at me and write about that. Just no cutting off my head, alrigt?

Just write from your heart.

Mm... I see. Well, thank you... I shall take note of this criticism. I know you probably think I don't mean that, but I truly do appreciate you telling me how you feel about my poems... I shall try to improve myself! *poke*

i went back and commetned on care for me. I discovered it after i wrote this. If you could expand more on ideas that seem to affect you, as this one mightve, then youre choosing a much better path i think. Keep in touch, id love to see what youve got in you. Like ive said before, you definitely have writing in you, youve just got practice and get down and dirty.

And thanks for not yelling, that takes a lot of maturity.

I shall pay heed to your advice. Thanks. ^^

Hmm... I am actually not very mature, to be honest... *pokes self*