finish my poem

This is a stanza i wrote when i was thirteen. it is a little funky but i have used it a million times on diffrent poems and i wanted to know where you all would take it.

"close my eyes
slit my wrists
kiss my dead frozen lips
cause thats all i am,
dead to you."

"Close my eyes and slit my wrists,
Kiss my dead, frozen lips,
'Cause that's all I am, dead to you,

And that's how you make me feel,
And I've felt it for so long,
With scarred wrists and red eyes,
Yeah, I've felt dead all along."

And a lot more I could write for ages.

Wow...that's effing brilliant Ismail.

awesome! I love what you all are doing!

^Shut up i love your part. lol :)

Lol Ismail I never heard of "idiot box" either, I assumed it was a TV =P

Score...it's new to me.

Hm, I have a question...why do you always put what you say, then put dots, then say a person's name...?

Ohhh. To me it's like you're being rude about it, just like...saying something then the person's name rudely, but that's me being assumptious. =) Thanks for clairifying (sp?). :}

Close my eyes, slit my wrists
Kiss my dead frozen lips
Cause thats all i am, dead to you.
Lifeless, in all that I attempt to do

I could be a sight of perfection
If your standards showed my reflection
But I'm not what you want to see
I'm nothing you wanted me to be

So once again I'll bleed
To give us both what we really need
I'll let you cut me apart
So you can put yourself in my heart

Why do we contiune to die
While I live in misery, and you lie
I could've been that girl whose always there
But I guess dead is fair

something off the top of my head

aww thanks mystic:)

Wow....awesome job Amy. I'm in awe.

NIce much better than any of my versions....

The Lies

Close my eyes,
Slit my wrists,
Kiss my dead frozen lips.
Touch my skin pale with fear,

Paint my lips black with death.
Paint my scares red with blood.
Paint my heart gray as stone.
Paint my eyes blue with tears.
Paint my soul white with sins.

Just look at my attire,
Who am I to speak of this?
To know the truth and untold bliss.
Fears and tears escape my sea,
My sea of hidden lies.

But who am I??
Dead inside, cold and lost,
Blue with pain, and frozen
Left to be calmed insane.

What am I to do?
Bleeding out every part of you,
Hiding the sins you told me to.
Scared to let the truth escape,
Escape my dead frozen lips.

The lips you once kissed and love.
Called your own,
Blood now flows over the hands your held
Water now showers the body you loved.

Close my eyes,
Slit my wrists,
Kiss my dead frozen lips,
That so faithfully hide the lies.

if this isn't old!