Grammar Question....

Both are sketchy and irregular, if one of them is wrong it's the second one.

Where's JPM when you need him?

I think they are both wrong

The second one is conscidered correct.

~Blessing The Night~
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I think both are wrong. This sounds more correct:

"She passed an elderly couple sitting outside a coffee shop discussing the weather, a teenager with neon purple hair, black clothes and too much makeup, and a man in a tuxedo rushing into a taxicab that reeked of tobacco."

That may also be wrong, but it seemed to be right to me.

The taxi cab that 'reeked of tobacco' is too much information to comprehend at the end of the sentence. The third person narrator is always omnipresent, but he seems to overstep the mark when he moves from sight to smell in one chunk.

I might be wrong. Hey oh.

The semicolon after weather is what I noticed to be wrong with both of them! I think it should just be a comma! Who knows maybe I am wrong too!

I agree, Brooke. I guess I'm used to the punchy syntax of, say, Hemmingway or even Chandler. The: "I walked into a bar. I ordered a drink. A guy in a tuxedo stared over at me. I sensed a bad day." Semicolons can be a bit disconcerting. in fact it seems the schools over here are avoiding them more and more these days for clarity.