help plz

i wrote a poem a while ago called 'my first love'. i posted it on the site recently. the more i read it the more there seems to be something missing. please can someone read it and advise me on how to improve on it. ty every1 that replies. xxx

I will could you please r/r/c on my poem called Now That Your GOne

I would appreicate it! Thanks you!
~*hAily*~

im on it now.

and thanx

xxx

it was a gr8 poem and thanx 4 ur comment

xxx