needs some help...

aww that poem does not suck! it is really good i like it alot expically since i can relate to it! keep up the good work...and i will read..vote..comment on ur poem if u do the same for my poem --silent--crys-- by brittany thanks so much!
xoxo brittany

It's not a bad poem at all, you just need some work with the flow...The second line could be something like ''Now the devil has won''...or like i've been outdone? The 6th line just needs to be re-worded but it's a good line...other than that it's a pretty good poem
Blue ~.^