improvment

I changed a stanza in my poem called blade. It used to read:

Oh how I long
for his warm embrace
To feel his presence with me
with me in this place

Now it reads:

Oh how I long
to feel him on my skin
To feel his blood adorned passion,
gently pressing in

I was wondering if you all think it is a good change.

Yeah I like the change :)

The change is better !