Need contructive Criticism!!! Will Repay!!!

Read a couple of my poems. tell me what id di good and what i can improve on and i will do the same for some of your poems. Thank you i would really appreciate it!!!

O.k.... Ill try, im still kinda new at this poetry stuff.

I will check some out. Go comment on any of mine at all :) thanks

could you constructive critacism on my these two poems

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i'll repay comment for comment