Willing to read a short story type of poem?

I would be thankful if anyone read my Lachrymae Rerum. I would definitely return the favour. Just bear in mind, it will be a long read, the poem is still in its infancy and I am working in the rhyme scheme. So, don't ask me to make a consistent rhyme scheme (I am working on that!) Thanks in advance, mates.

I will do a constructive argumental critique on your work if you do the same. Please do not simply write: "Good, nice, 5/5"