Hey can you guys help me with this please?

  • Kia
    19 years ago

    I dont know what to call this poem i wrote it last night, and im having trouble comming up with a name.
    Happiness
    Where can it be found?
    Around me
    My friends surround
    But happiness is not found.
    Drugs
    Are an escape from reality
    Drugs however
    Help for a very short time in all actuality
    As I cut
    The blood starts to flow
    For a moment
    My Heart starts to glow
    But as I look
    At the scars
    I wonder why
    I'm kept behind these bars
    These bars
    In my life
    Are not physical, however
    They are put there by my dad and his wife.
    By the pressure
    They put on me
    To be perfect
    I just wanna be free
    I'm tired
    So tired of it
    This is the end
    I'm not gonna take any more shit.

  • julie
    19 years ago

    enough? not perfect? tired? open wounds? just a few suggestions, great poem by the way ;) julie -xx-

  • Kia
    19 years ago

    hey, thanks, yea i already have one called so tired, but open wounds sound good thanks.

  • Kia
    19 years ago

    What are you talkin about? what do you mean? How is it bad?