Please comment on Liasion Perplexity

Anyone and everyone, PLEASE vote and comment on this poem it is my 1st posted poem and I really would love someones feedback!!!!!! Thanks so much

It really good. Nice start. Could you look at some of mine...erm..try:

"A secret never to be told..." or whatever floats your boat.

Thanks
xxx

[lostlaureate - come find me]