Any comments/suggestions greatly appreciated!!!!

Let me know what u think of ma poem...will be entering a contest but want (and in need) of honest feedback.....constructive critisicm welcome from all!

Poem is called: Only A State Of Mind

here is the direct link...

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=663016

Thanks to all who take the time!!!!

I had a look at it, its awesome...

Please could you look at:

"The plea of the slient few" remember to rate. It's pretty dire at the moment so advice is welcomed.

All the best...

[lostlaureate-come find me]

np I will do that first thiong tomorrow or tonite if i can get access to a computer...lol

work got really busy so i didn't have a chance today...sorry.

but i look forward to it tomorrow first thing!

thanks for taking the time to comment, i really appreciate it

k..read it and it was amazing...i left a comment and hopefully today I will have a chance to read more of your work...!!!
Very impressed.