+CONTEST+ mother nature (big prizes)

The Winners of my Mother Nature themed Contest are as follows. And mind you, this was not an easy task.

1st) Live in Unison With Nature by Daniel Mulvany
2nd)Untitled by Ruby
3rd)power of the wind by Poonam
4th)Peaceful Silence by Sunny
5th)A Tree In Winter by Apathetic Soul
6th)Love between Moon and Lake by PURE HEART

The following, I never planned on having any special awards, but I decided I would need one after reading it....

Honnor Award: TRAMP by Sluvious

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Comments:

+Live in Unison With Nature: Very beautifully written. Unique rhyming scheme,
but flowed nicely once I got used to it.

+Untitled: Very nicely done. Easy to read, nice imagry.. just all around great read!

+power of the wind: Very descriptive. Great imagry.

+A Tree In Winter: Very descriptive. You paint such a beautiful picture with your words.

+Love between Moon and Lake: I didnt really "feel" this one. But, it was an amazing concept, and a not an easy one to tackle either.

+TSUNAMI: It tells the story well, But it lacked the feeling I was really looking for. More specifically, I would have liked the focus to be more on the wave (mother nature) than the people

+TRAMP: Beautifull poem. It was yes, about an animal, but didnt stick so much to the theme of
"mother nature" that I was going for. When I said "animals" I was meaning a wild animal, rather than a domesticated one. Sorry I didnt make that more clear. But, none the less, I could not let this go without reward!
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PRIZES:

1st - All poems commented on and rated (or at least all the ones I havnt already done) and a mention in my profile
2nd - Half of all your poems commented and rated
3rd - 5 Comments and Votes
4th - 4 Comments and Votes
5th - 3 Comments and Votes
6th - 2 Comments and Votes

Honnor Award - 5 Comments and Votes
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All Awards will be payed out by Next Sunday.

Thank You!

Live in Unison With Nature

Through the long lost days of past
For the rest of my days until the last
I'll remember the things of the present day
So as not to lose them fast
And life will go on bittersweet
With the songbirds gentle tweet
And the treetops subtle sway
Never stilling to a stop complete
But when the sway stops or the tweet
Stills to lose its steady beat
My soul will long to fly away
To the land of golden streets
Then forever in reply
The songbirds singing in the sky
Never will tail far away
From the sway of the treetops high
And nature goes on ever still
Never losing rhythm until
The songbirds tweet or the treetops sway
We the humans of this world kill

Topic: WATER

TSUNAMI

The ocean rose with a brilliant blue,
The winter sun shone bright, yet not strong.
“The day’s just begun!” said the mother of two,
She kissed both her boys and hummed a song.

The three were on vacation,
In the land of the white elephant;
Thailand was a fine destination,
Till today, for it was time for nature to hunt.

“I’m going to play ball, Mama!”
Informed the eldest son;
“I’m off to the pool!” said the younger,
“Bye!” both of them said in unison.

Hotel Sea Breeze was a tiny seaside inn,
The pool was by the hall;
Mama’s little one was wild with joy,
The elder one loved ball!

The perfect vacation, thought the mother,
Just as she saw two pet dogs bark;
Just then the horses run and the birds flutter
And the sun bathing mom grew dark.

How strange, she thought for this change,
Maybe this is a warning from above;
She saw the seashells in plenty,
The ocean had stepped back as if to bow.

She looked at the sea, she rubbed her eyes,
She wondered what was wrong,
Was it the sea or her eyes?
Ah! Suddenly her mind heard a gong.

She was definitely not mistaken,
What she saw was a massive wave!
The horizon rose on her,
The sea had begun its rave.
Tsunami, tsunami! She tried to yell,
Her mouth had opened up,
However the sound was not heard,
As the water filled her mouth back up.

Her eyes were hazy; sand crept up her nose,
Pool and ball was all she thought.
The gull above saw a beach of blue,
With red umbrellas floating like tots.

Older John heard the crashing wave,
He leapt up to the window to see;
His brother’s pool was not in sight
And his mother’s beach was like blue tea.

He burst into tears and screamed,
He knew at once the two were drowning;
“Who should I save first God, help me!”
He shrieked, and started howling.

With no delay, he lunged towards the pool,
He saw his brother’s green trunks!
Silently praying, he jumped in the foam
And pulled out the handsome hunk.

“Oh! Oh! Thank you God!” said John,
His brother was pale yet live and well.
“Wait here little Bill I’ll go to Mama!”
He picked a tube leapt into the wet hell.

“Mom!” He shouted over and over,
All he got was the sea’s foaming hiss,
He lost no hope and searched the sea
For four hours, with a golden wish.

He slowly knew she wasn’t there,
He wailed, shed blinding tears;
One last time he shouted out loud
“Hear Mom! Here!”

The sea had retreated with its soil,
Left only stony expanse beneath;
No more was there hope and joy,
All that was left was death.

“I must go back to little Bill!”
Said John to himself,
Oh I cannot lose him Lord!
Help me help myself!

He hurried back to Bill in tears,
And a nightmare he saw swell;
Bill must have gone for Mom!
He thought, I’ve lost him as well!

This cannot be! Oh no!
His mind tore him away;
Under all the pain and misery
John fainted, and at the pool he lay.

Nature had unleashed herself that day,
It seemed she had not spared a fly;
The ocean hath whelped up its shells,
Anyone in between would have to die.

John awoke in ‘St. Mary’s Home’,
You wouldn’t believe what he saw;
It was the most astonishing thing,
Mother’s eyes and his brother’s paw!

What? John pinched himself to believe
That sight he stared at was true,
The pinch hurt, it wasn’t just a dream,
It was a dream come true!

Mother had saved herself,
Rushed to the pool to save Bill;
John had gone to find her,
So God’s prayer bank she did fill.

God answered all their prayers,
John, fainted at the pool she found;
She lifted him up with daring courage,
And the three were safe and sound.

Nature had been merciful,
She was a mother too, after all;
To the three She had left a message,
‘God is merciful to one and all.’

-Dhaval Shah

Love between Moon and Lake

The sky is so dark and moon is so white,
yet they are together every night.

The lake so calm holds the moon,
in the silent whispers of night.
The moon is shining so white,
spreading its pure light.

The breeze blows to touch the soul of lake,
and tries to kiss the moon lying on the bed of the lake.

The lake shivers and thrills,
with the blow of insane breeze.
The moon is lying on the chest of the lake,
and the tide is disturbing the peace.

The birds' chirping breaks the silence,
the leaves are singing and playing the violin.
All the creatures like frog, swan and dove,
are together humming the song of love.

The moon whizzles in the arms of the lake,
feeling the love for his own sake.
But he knows he cannot be there forever,
because his fate is with the sky and not with the lake ever.

Still the love between the moon and the lake is so strong,
they meet every night breaking all the bonds.
The sky can just look at the scene,
as he knows the real one is with him...

Good Luck Everyone!

*Poem Withdrawn*

From now on, please everyone, clearly lable what topic your poem is under, I know it should be obvious, but humor me,...

and just to check...

+Daniel Mulvany,

Im assuming yours is under the topic of "Animals"
IF NOT, please specify.

And

+PURE HEART,

I currently have yours under "Water" If that is incorrect, I need to know.

+Sole,

It seems you posted after both water spaces were taken up, BUT, I will still accept yours....
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BUT BE CLEAR, there will be no other acceptions.... For now, there is no deadline untill more spaces are taken up.

thank you, keep up the good work

yeah! its under -water.

:o Sorry! My bad - I'm going to withdraw my poem.

Peace. [Sole]

*sigh* but I really liked yours lol..... but I guess your right lol.. I shouldnt bend the rules for people, but for what its worth, it really was beautifull!!!

Thanks :) I might enter another a little later - not time to write at the moment though, sorry!

sunny...i hate you :P give us some chance to win now will you....hahaha again youre gonna win :P awesomeeeeeeeee poem

good work guys!!! keep it up!!!

topic wind

edit: i just wanted to rearrange it a bit, easier on the eyes:

power of the wind

the wind holds the power
to carry the lowest soul
to the highest of all mountains
let yourself be taken,
be held in its power
fly among the clouds the stars the birds
see the sun up close, let it carry you.
the breeze brings the fragrances of
all exotic flowers. The jasmine
circles you, calling, the soft scent
teases in the light zephyr. The wind
tickles the green leaves upon the tallest trees.

the wind also battles on the darkest of days.
The mixture of clouds, fear, rain,
and fury fight along side And against the wind.
Raging against the hard angry reign of
humans. The droplets pushed by the tempest,
hit you hard making you fall to the ground
in submission. And air pulls
your long obsidian hair
making you stare at the
furious wind dominated sky.

Cherish all nature around you,
for the wind is the guardian who
can hold you tight and carry you high
to another plane or destroy you
with the lightest of buffets.
So listen and love
and fly higher and be humbled.

Topic: FIRE
Crashing Fire
No.Need.For.A.Name.

A crashing fire
Light the night sky
Show true beauty
Hit the sky to make your noise
Finger of God branding the world over us
Showing that dark is only dark
No death within it
No Destruction within it
No fear within it
The crahing fire unmasks the dark night

GOOD WORK EVERYONE!!

5 More Left!!!

NOTICE:

I have just put a deadline for all remaining entries!

FRIDAY, MAY 12th

After Midnight, US Eastern Time, I will not accept any more entries.

Thank you.

Mine, I would say, would be under trees. Sorry about the confusion.

I guess it really could be under either one though.

C'mon guys!!!

hey can i put one n about the sesons?
it has alot to do with mother nature...

Ruby

No Ruby, sorry. Maybe in a future contest. This one has to specifically do with the previous stated topics.

c'mon people... no more takers???

Sun yellow, bright red
the colour of her clothes
flickering from tree to tree
and burning as she goes

devouring all in her path
as she races and leaps so high
leaving behind blue-grey wreaths
to float and caress the sky

free as the sky born birds
her temper quick to flare
devastating as she spreads
blinding with her glare

tamed to light and warm and cook
to clear, to light a pyre
but wild to the core is she
the raging forest fire.

Alright, just two more spots left! a tree and an earth!

C'mon people! only one more day!!!!!

the sad water...

Dip my finger into the sea
desperate to break the wild night
cold and smooth
form a glee
stay,linger , and die
immature torrents
crawling high, sobbing
brought the voice of..
reason.....
from the past
purple dream
the speecless eye
killing lonely
soundless movement
a cup of gloom
hiding peacefully
the dark sad water...
it just not enough
to make me
cry......

I'm sorry, yuniardi, but all the water spots have already been taken.

C'mon!!!! Only a few more hours till closing!!!!!

CLOSED!!!!!

Winners will be announced Sunday, May 14th.

THATS TODAY!

See Top Post for winners and other details.

Wow, thank you very much. I'm very excited. My first contest win on here. Good job, everybody else. Keep writing.

WOW

thanks so much!!! this was one of teh most original contests iv seen in a while

Ruby

aww thanks! that was a fun contest

yay awards soon!!!

Ruby

Thank you for all your comments. You were very honest and I know it took alot of time. I look forward to seeing what/any contests you have in the future.
Daniel Mulvany

Youre very welcome, Im sorry I couldnt have been more critical, but for most of them, there wasnt really anything wrong with them to point out. Ive never been very good at critiques, but Im glad My comments where to your satisfaction. I will be starting a new contest very soon. Hope to see you there! :)