please read this and critque it! i'm eneterin school comp.

You'll never know
how i feel inside
or anything
these pale eyes hide

hidden behind smiles,
giggles and laughs,
the girl you think i am...
...well I'm only half

my ears are ringing
my stomachs tight
my minds dizzy
I'm losing sight

this is my addiction
this is what i do
without all of these pills
I'd never make it through

first its just one,
then two, three, or four,
five, six, seven, eight,
more and more and more

its just another cut,
its just another pill,
I'm just another empty girl
at least thats how i feel

but you'll never know,
you'll never see,
the addicted girl
I've come to be