new writer..please comment!!

hey I'm kind of a new writer and I'm not used to the whole stanza thing and all that stuff lol but i just wrote some stuff and if you could tell me what you think of it.............like i said i'm kind of new
but i would appreciate to hear from some more *experienced* writers.

thank you so much.
your friend in poetry, shauna.

Can you please read my two featured poems ^_^

I sent you an email......Are we friends?

If you want I'll try and help you out.