Together, forever, we shall lay..

heyy! will you please read this poem,

"Together, forever, we shall lay.."

i think my writing is slipping as my rating has gone down.. could you please read it and tell me what you think? i will reply asap to any comments!
thnxx in advance!
-jessy-

thank youu! that was an amazing poem! :)

anyone else? pweeze?

anyone??

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thnxx! wow.. what an awesome poem! keep it up!

anyone elsee?