please r/r/c?? pleasee??

please r/r/c my poems.. i only hav 6 and no one has really told me what is good or bad about them.. pllease have a look, please?
very in need of advice,
Ye Seul

I've commented three, if you want me to comment on the rest just let me know.

heyy.. she doesn't get to go on the internet very much, so she prob. wont reply soon but im sure she would love it if you commented on the rest!
jessy xox