Help choosing a subtopic for poem

  • Charissa
    19 years ago

    I have this poem i wrote on love but i don't know where to EXACTLY place it..so if u dont mind plz read and suggest a location ty....

    Losing You

    We have made it passed many complications
    Due to a lot of messed up situations
    6 months now we have been dating
    And each day there was at least one person hating
    Now our relationship is growing,
    And stronger feelings are showing
    I feel you pulling away
    All because you do not know what to say
    I feel that I am losing you
    And soon we will be through
    I wish I could help you understand
    But doing it alone is what you demand
    I just wish you could talk to me
    So confusion is no longer what I see
    I see myself losing you
    And I wish I knew what to do
    5 out of the 6 months have been great
    And I couldn’t wait till our 6th month date
    But this past month hasn’t been the same
    And it really is a shame
    When the day of our 6th month came I didn’t even see you
    And as far as I was told you wish it wasn’t even true
    You told me that you really loved me
    Even more than I could even think or see
    And now I see that I am losing you
    I really hope that it is untrue
    I just want everything to be alright
    So come here and hold me tight
    Then I’ll know that I am not losing you
    And it is still us two

  • Sean Allen
    19 years ago

    you could try 'lost love', though there are a lot of corrections you should make to your poem first.

    e.g.
    the title, and everywhere else in the poem, it should be 'losing', not 'loosing'

    "We have made it pass many complications"
    "But this pass month hasn’t been the same"
    it should be 'past' not 'pass'

    "Even more then I could even think or see"
    it should be 'than' not 'then'