Another Sean Allen thing...

Not quite as enthusiastic a title this time!

I'd like comments and rates on:

The Red String of Fate (A Sean-ian Sonnet)
The Red String of Fate (A Nonet)

things I'd like particular attention paid to (if you read both) is the contrast between the two, and whether the title effectively dealt with both, or one better than the other. Wikipedia 'red string of fate' if you're unsure about what it is.

don't limit your comments to the above though.

I'll double what you comment, so either 2 or 4. Post suggestions or otherwise I'll just rampage through your innocent poems and comment on what I please.

I don't have any new ones though =(

I'll do this tomorrow =)

riiiight, you're on aussie time... bizarre ;-)

Alright

will have a look afterwards! :)

binks, tell if what sort of comments you want on what poems, or tell me that you want me to go wild, and how many I have to do, then I'll get started.

If I'm going to even attempt to be a writer someday I need as honest comments as you can get on my two featured please.

okay binks, done with your poems

jessy, what about your poems?

there you go! :) all done.. um, any of mine.. i dont really mind.. thank youu!

alrighy, done jessy

lol, thanks for doing all the ooollddd poems :P tehee, thank you!

I already have done your new ones, lol

lol, i know, i was just joking with you! :) thankss!

Sean!?!?!?! You wrote some lyrics, eh?

yeah, heh... Iono if they're any good, really my first shot at lyrics

they were good :)

Still taking orders!

I'll do them =) Lol.. If you could just do 'Broken Memories' That'd be cooool.

**edit**
I did one. Cause I'd already done the other one. =)

Broken Memories is teh done.

Sean I have read some of your poems and commented on them. i think you are a really talented writer! Keep it up! :) If you don't mind would you look at some of mine? Please and thank you lol.

Mallori, could you tell me really quick how many poems I should be commenting on, and are there any ones you'd specifically want critiqued?

I have commented on 2 of yours I believe so you may pick 2 of mine lol. I really don't care witch ones you choose its all gravy with me lol.

Okay, I've done 2 of yours I believe... my memory is going and I'm only 18. Sad.

Hehe its ok. And thanks for your advice I really appriecate it......I think i spelled that right lol.

Sean you can raed, "Silver Key." I need an honest comment. The more the better.

Done binks... is there something else I can call you besides binks by the way?

My friend's call me Kay. I'll comment on one of your poems in a few.

Still applies to all you people out there! Actually, this is going to turn into a thread for semi-free comments too.. At least for people who have already read my most recent poems.

oooh! do me then :P i'd love some commentss! :D

Lol.. Does that include me? =D Lol

The catch is you have to tell me what poems! Bwahaha!

...I'm not going to spelunk through your poetry to find poems I haven't commented on =P

Lol..it includes me now. Cause I just did your new one =P

But okay, I'll come back in a second, Lemme look at what poem I want done, Lol.

hehe.. okay thenn :D could you do my latest three please? i dont think you have done themm.. xox!

Mmkay. I found one. =) 'Bathroom Hauntings' pwease. Lol .......if you wanna do more, you can =P Haha

There's a good reason why I haven't done your latest three jessy, it's because they're love poems, and I can't do them from work =(

Natalie, I've done bathroom hauntings, though I thought from the title that it'd be considerably funnier than it turned out to be...

hehe.. okay thenn.. :) ill go have a look for some you havn't done! :P

Thanks, Lol.. ahh, yeah. I only picked that one cause my new one is like a second part from that..Cause of all the glass stuff..

hey sean.. i read them both.. and theyre both awesome in their own way..

id reli appreciate it if u read my latest.. and "Seasons" if u cud get to that

well.. thnx a lot in advance
take care
NannO

Alright, commented NannO