poem for a birthday

i wrote a poem for a friend, to put on a birthday card for her , i posted it on the site , so i could see wheter ppl liked it and therefore wheter it was good enough to write it on the birthday card, for now it got very low votes :s, but no comments as for why ,
so, did I make a huge grammar error, a stupid spelling mistake or does it really just sucks :s
I did put quite some time in it
so, if someone could tell me why it is so bad, or that it really isn't good enough and why
it's called "hope and faith"
thanks alot

seemed fine. someone probably downvoted it.