The Dreaded Ex-Girlfriend...(I'll comment if you do!)

These thoughts; my head
Her body; your bed
A mental barrier I can't break through
Her skin and the way she touches you
I scribble down the emotions I fail to say
If I keep them hidden, will they go away?
The thoughts strip me of my strength completely
Left naked- I try to become what she could never be
So much of your life and time is written in your past with her
She's the life-ending disease of which there is no cure
She broke you and left what remained to me
I am the cherished glue glun that she will never be
She cut you- and when she did-she cut you deep
So many of my hushed emotions surface as we sleep
When she cut you-she silently killed me
And now we bleed together trying to forget what used to be
Your pain becomes my pain; that's how love works
In this game there will be tragedies that follow the many perks
Hands move; lips press
Shredded clothes; a sinful mess
Secrets burried in tangled sheets
The disturbing image forever repeats
In my head; in my hearts
Shattered hopes; ripped apart

I think this poem expresses a feeling that most people have felt when we think of the one we love being with someone else. At least thats what I got
out of it . I liked it.
Deana

Even though the whole poem isn't supposed to be posted, you did an excellent job. It saves work for us having to read the poem. But it also gives us more work to then find the poem out of all of your written ones, then comment it, and rate it. Flow was ok, not the greatest. I liked how you described how you felt. Great write. Keep it up! xoxo

Samantha