love song

i need help i had started to write this song but don't no what eles to write if you could help that would be great thank you

here is what i wrote

as i count the days go by
i sit here and wonder why
were are you right now
you right now
i love you but i'm not sure if you love me any more
were are you right now
you right now

XXOOXXOOXXOO LINDA

how about this?

(i tried calling you).

smth like that, sori can't think of any but if i didn..i'll leave you amessage...anywayZ is this a luv song or sad luv song?..

Cange of key and go into a bridge enroute for the chorus.

something like:
And though I know it wasn't meant to be
your still the one for meeee eeeee, yeah.
And though I've been in love before
my hearts an open door for yooou oooh
so come on let me know.

Catchy chorus needed with a good hook.

Return to initial words you put etc

The were should be where..

Just a tiny error.

I tried to call you
But nobody answered
I wonder if you love me anymore,
If you care at all.
If you gave me the simplest smile,
As I walked by,
You'd have my heart forever,
I'd even let you see me cry.

I sit here and wonder why,
where are you right now,
you right now,
I wonder if you're even there anymore,
I wonder if you even care anymore.

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Um, couldn't think of too much more. You can take any of those ideas.

//T.L.//