Are you ready for a challenge?

Alright I am looking for constructive comments on my featured poems. The reason I am is because I need to know how my writing is so I can learn to write more poems. A friend of mine offered to help me put a book together and I want to have some really awsome work to show him. The more helpful your comments are letting me know how you felt reading them etc, the more detailed I'll be when reading one or two of your poems. PLEASE RATE AS WELL.

Guess nobody's up for this :(