Deal?

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Okay if you r/r/c my poem Move On, I'll r/r/c 2 of your poems! if you read 2 of my poems Ill read 4 of yours.. So on and so on. Just tell me how many you read of mine and post what poems you want me to read of yours!

    P.S- Please dont critise the gramar and that.. Just make it feel like someones talkin to you.. I become a horrible writer when ppl downsize my poems. And it makes me feel so horrible that alot of people hate my poems.

  • Kaylee
    19 years ago

    I'll read two if you can honestly! comment and rate my featured four.

  • Samantha Hollywood
    19 years ago

    Deal! I`ll do two of yours ;; please do ::

    Confessions (from myself)
    But We Knew You Never Cared
    Comparision To Love
    The Beauty Of Music

    Thanks!

  • xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex
    19 years ago

    I did three... So in return I'd like you to do these three poems and any other three that catches your eye...

    The Suns's Failing Doom

    The Darkness

    Rusting Angels

    xDarkSuicidex Thanks.

    And I tried to be honest on my critiques, hope you don't mind.

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Kaylee,

    I r/r/c

    - Tarnished Mute
    - Hush
    - Metal of Hunger
    - In Mommy's Arms (For Laci and Conner Peterson)

  • Kaylee
    19 years ago

    I'll explain three of the poems for you.
    Tarnished Mute is about a nightmare I had over a year ago involving date rape. That's why I mention a date rape drug in the first stanza. arnish meaning discolored because of dirt (Dirty feeling) and mute (someone who can't speak).The ant part was another way of saying hands.
    Metal of Hunger is about a metaphor for handcuffs. More of a true story feeling of knowing you could be the person that could send somebody you know to prison. I used some of the words to describe a sick feeling of knowing this.
    Hush is kind of a true story too in which the first half describes abuse and the second describing the effect it leaves with the voice ofsomeone saying it'ssomething you can't tell.
    As for the words I just used a thesaurus website so I could find deeper words to explain things.
    It did hurt to see the rating go down but I know sometimes I don't make the meaning really clear. Mostly because the poems about something that is still a bit of a secret and I didn't want to flat out tell people I know if they read them.

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Samantha Hollywood,

    I r/r/c

    - Confessions (from myself)
    - But We Knew You Never Cared
    - Comparision To Love
    - The Beauty of Music

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Brianna,

    I r/r/c

    - I'm Sorry
    - Let Me Be "The One"
    - Sometimes I Wonder..
    - Just Tell Me You Want This

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    xDarkSuicidex

    I r/r/c

    - The Sun's Failing Doom
    - The Darkness
    - Rusting Angels
    - Not Sure Of A Title
    - The Dreamer
    - The Mirrors

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Museum,

    I r/r/c

    - A Little Demon in Your Soul

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Kaylee,

    Im sorry that I rated you lower.. I shouldve asked you first. But it kinda confused me. Im Sorry!

  • Damien
    19 years ago

    Hey, Fyrstyr here,
    I've read two of your poems and found them both very good. Not so fond of the darker stuff but it held an impact and that's what matters.

    don't listen to anyone being critical about the grammar. If they want good grammar, let them read a novel...

  • Kaylee
    19 years ago

    It's alright. Just hope some people understand them. I was told never to ut the meaning of a poem as a description. Someone told me that it takes away from them.

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Garbear,

    I r/r/c

    - Inner City Prophecies
    - Heaven's Latest Angel
    - Let Me Know
    - Imagine
    - Mending
    - Amore
    - Clouds
    - Mutual Loss
    - Swimming To The Surface
    - Lasting Wings

  • TheWorldFellNUWerentThere
    19 years ago

    Sorry but sometimes the stupid ratings dont work for me. I'll keep trying to vote but I dont garentee the stupid voting thing will work.