Dark Poetry Contest.

Yeah, I just posted that earlier. It is fine with me. I was trying not to have two done by any participants, so this would help that. I will still take all three in though. =]] But yeah, then that gives me more time to vote as well. =]

-Jenna.

I have them all on one document, and I am voting, I just need DS poem. And then I will finish. =]

-Jenna.

Lol, probably not. I will send her a PM when I get home from school today. =] But then I'd have to judge it tomorrow when I get home from my friends.

-Jenna.

-Looks around- Am I still aloud? =S So sorry guys... I just now saw this! =[ And I do believe I could have written a good one... Ah, well, it happens..

xDarkSuicidex

Lol, yes, we are waiting for you to finish it silly lol. It's okay though, get it in whenever, because I am busy up until next weekend I do believe. Well, Tuesday I have some free time after work if I don't have homework but yeah lol. You can still write it! =]]

-Jenna.

Excellent! I will have it in asap.. I am finishing up a poem now and I will start on it tomorrow and try to finish it then... I promise. If not, please give me a chance.. I just found this again tonight. Thank you so much for waiting! I'll do my best for you!

xDarkSuicidex

Whooo.. It is done! And 45mins before my time was up! (I said I'd finish it 'tomorrow' well, 45 more minutes and it would have been two days.)

--Also.. I tried something new.. A new rhyme scheme...Hope it works well. =]
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A Beating Heart

Thump, thump; throb throb;
Hold it close to your chest.
Pulsing, pulsing; dripping, dripping
Fall into a lasting rest.

Seeping through your hand,
A blood so deep, a blood so bland.
Squeeze tightly to what you possess,
Something so precious, something to bless.

Bleed, bleed, thrash, thrash;
Beating to the sound of the wind.
Whisper, whisper; Faster, faster;
Crying out to comfort him.

Breathe a soft tuft of breath,
Thinking of forbidding, thinking of death.
Upon a heart so cold and lone,
Triggering this heart, triggering this home.

Hush, hush; Closer, closer;
Caress the heart within your hand.
Attempt, attempt; Harder, harder;
Fall to your knees; don't try to stand.

xDarkSuicidex

Thanks Darling, and yes I did like it. =] I will finish this after cheerleading tomorrow. Thanks for your patience. =]

-Jenna.

Okay, this was a really hard contest to judge because all of these poems were beyond amazing. But, I had to narrow it down to 8. So...

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First - xDarkSuicidex ; A Beating Heart - - You always amaze me with your poetry, no matter what style, what topic, you always grasp my attention from the very first stanza and hold it until the last. This poem, as you said, was different. But, it was a very good different. I loved the repetition sounds in it, it got the idea through. It created a vivid picture in my mind as well as I'm sure everyone elses. You have a talent. Great job!

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Second - Twisted Heart ; The Swimming Pool - - I have not read a lot of your work, only in the contest forums; however, whenever I do read your poems, I am always taken aback. Your words, your skills, just all of it. It is amazing. You, have also got talent. The poem you entered here, I read it probably around 15 times, and everytime I did, I was nearly in tears and I got the chills. It was a great poem, and it fit this contest perfectly. The ending was very strong as well which made it all the better. Great Job!

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Third - Beth ; The Icecream Man - - I have never read any of your work before this contest, and this poem made me think about how talented some writers on this site are; but they all go unnoticed. Some of the more noticed poets on this site, the real high up there poets entered, and you were just as amazing to me as they were. You have a remarkable talent, and I hope you know that. As for your poem that you had entered, you did exactly what I had asked. When I think of an icecream truck; I think of happy children, of summer, of the hot sun. And after I read your poem, it created a whole new perspective. Great job!

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Fourth - im.in.denial© ; Dozen Roses (To Kill) - - You are also another writer that I often don't see getting noticed around the site. You have a lot of room to grow in your writing and I think you have the imagination and creativity that is required to do so. This poem, was outstanding. I read it over and over again. There were a few things that I think you could change to fix it; maybe make a stronger ending because the power of the rest of the poem outdoes the last line, and normally, the last line should be the strongest. And, in the number seven and eight line, you skipped the pattern. The whole poem you had number ____ and number ____ and then that line was missing that essence. It is up to you, I just think that would make that piece stronger. But the poem, overall, was amazing. It took my breath away. Great job!

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Fifth - Half-Demon (Noni©) ; Candles - - This poem was also exactly what I was looking for. You tied all of the elements of what a typical person thinks of when they think candles and changed it around to be dark. It gave me chills and that is what I like when I read dark poetry. You also amaze me with your talent. You blow me away with every new piece that you submit onto this site, and I always click your name when it says you have a new one. You have a remarkable talent. Great job!

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Sixth - ♥JeSS♥ ~Squiggle Master~ ; Children's Laughter - - You were a great participant in this contest. You stayed tuned in and you wrote poems that no one else was going to write soon enough. This poem, left me with tears in my eyes. The ending wrapped it up better than I thought it would have and it was a good thing that it did. I love being proved wrong with my predictaments in poetry; it makes me look harder when I read. And you did just that. Great job!

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Eighth - Brianna .ღ. ; Mirror, Mirror; It Can't Be - - You are one of those poets that never seems to fail people. When I read your poetry, it somehow always has a major affect on me. They style that you use to write, is different; and I like that. This poem, made me think of the one that I was working on a while back with the whole empty pill bottle and knife aspect or whatnot. It gave me inspiration to keep working on that poem, and that is what I am going to do. Great job!

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Eighth - DreadingTime; A Lakeside Pond - - Another one of the writers that I have never heard of before this contest. I feel so bad for not reading around a lot more besides those that are on my favorites list. I am sorry. But, this poem blew me away, it was truly amazing. Your talent really did show in this one, and I loved what you turned it into. Great Job!

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Great Job to everyone who entered and a special congratulations to all the winners. Continue to amaze me and blow me away with the next part of the contest. I will post that In a seperate Topic. So write the next part in there please.

-Jenna.

Jenna--
The comments you left were amazing, first off. I read them all and you are very gracious.
Secondly, I beg you a thousand words of thanks for your kind words. My poetry means the world to me and to know that you love it as well, really touches me. I really did not think the poem was going to do well, for I wrote it quickly and a new style...But, I am immensly glad you loved it. =]
Finally, I also love your work and often read your poems... Just, thank you.

xDarkSuicidex

Darling, it was really no problem at all. Dark poetry is one of my favorite topics to read and this contest truly kept me smiling with every entry. And no problem, I can tell that your poetry means a lot to you, as well as to many other people. You are, without a doubt, one of my favorite writers, not only on this site, but of all the work I have ever read.

-Jenna.

Haha, sorry everyone. I skipped number four. Someone else pointed that out to me and thanks for doing so! Lol. I will add it in a second. Gosh, I feel stupid for that lol. -Blushes.-

-Jenna.

One of your favorites..ever? I am behind flattered.. There is no words for what that made me feel.. Thank you, so much...
-Is Now Rendered Speechless.-

xDarkSuicidex

thankz for the criticization! i kno i'm not known, but well, i need more practice! lol. yep yep!

Dark, lol, no problem. I am only speaking the truth. -blushes.-

-Jenna.

Lol, no problem Darling! =]

-Jenna.