(((((((((((((((((((NEW DEAL))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

My new poem (HOW CAN I) too short, just read it, leave your comment and a vote please, and that will be enough for me to pay you back, just leave your 2-3 titles here.....

Goron some of your poem isn't grammar correct and it gets messed up : ( You start good but th efourth line shouldn't begin with how and the last line should be you're not you. Thought I should tell you if you wanted to fix it.

Done :D Very good.. left a suggestion for the third line so as to be able to keep the fourth line, hope You don't mind.. am sure You could figure it out Yourself anyway.. Ok am going to shhhhh now lol could You do my latest please? :]

thanks fixed it,

and i done 4 poems of yours, tnx again, and road, i have not started my last line with you'r or you.. i dont know which one you mean

I meant fifth

....The pretty smile while you gazing in my eyes

Thank You soooo much :D.. on the last line, it says You and should be You're I think.. am going to bed now, but am going to read more of your work tomorrow when I get back on xx

oh, but it is going to be 11th syllobes then, any suggestion please?

The pretty smile when You gaze in my eyes?
or 'as You gaze in my eyes'

i think it is great but isnt that 9?

i am so confuse,lol
but thanks alot for your help

the word 'smile' is the only confusing word in there to me.. if that has one syllable, like I read it then the sentence has ten syllables.. but if it has two, then it has eleven *doh.. really am going to bed now.. this site is too addictive lol.. goodnight x

thanks i think it is done now,lol.