Safe Haven comment trade (If you've read it post here what you t

Alright, I know I'm trying to push this character out on here but I do need to know how people react to her, is she real, is her story intresting to keep the reader entertained.

Safe Haven is a random scene from a story I am trying to write. Right now I'm writing random scenes but I want the complete story done by early Nov! Yes, I want to write a complete story of novel length by that time and because the character is intresting for at least me I know I have a good chance of having that done. But right now I need to test the character out. So please read, comment, and vote on the scene but mostly on the character herself. I know you might be confused here and there but remember it's the middle and I haven't worked much on the start.

I'll comment two poems in return only if you leave titles. No dark poems please. If you read mine tell me ehere too what you thought and maybe other people might read it then.