rememberance day!?!?!

please read these two peoms and tell me how they are.. . only one is for rememberance day... thanx a bunch.. i will comment on yours if you would like also... just give the link or name of poem you would like me to veiw... and i will surely do it :)

--Terra

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/life/poems.php?id=768773

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/nature/poems.php?id=767173