New Poems!! [2 for 4] Deal

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Hey everyone,

    I have two new poems out, "Assisted Suicide" and "A Phase For Teenage Hearts". If you read both of those poems, I will read 4 of your poems, and possibly an extra. You could also read 1 of my poems and I will read 2 of yours.

    1 for 2
    or
    2 for 4 (maybe +1)

    Thanks,
    Darien

  • Tammie
    19 years ago

    Done. You are a great writer!

    Could you please do:

    The Last Sad Song
    Mistakes And Memories
    An End Seeled With A Kiss
    Heart, Mind, Body

    Thanks heaps. =]

    Tammie

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    haha Jess.. what the!?.. since when were you my SMAWCE cousin?.. lol ohh man
    who the heck is our family!?!?.. we need to make a family tree or something!! haha..

    Alrighty.. I'm on it :)

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Jess:

    I really liked the Haiku's you did, only because I never really tried them. Your poetry is very mature for someone your age and you have a very wide vocabulary. You will definitely grow as a writer if you keep on writing.

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Tammie:

    The four poems I have read were sad poems, and they all followed one theme, suicide. It seems you have a lot on your mind and it creates and emotional imbalance, however it seems like you are dealing with it and writing about it does help. Your poetry although it lacks creativity and originality, are really well written. If I had read some of your other poems, I may have said something different. But from what I have read, that is what I believe. You are still a very talented writer, and you write of your topic well.

  • twisted reality
    19 years ago

    Sure I'll do them. Will you please do:

    `The Song
    `Rejection
    `Empty
    `Just Me

    Thanks in advance! =) xoxo

    Samantha

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Samantha:

    Your poems are very well written, however they are sometimes all over the place. Your thoughts wonder from point to point, and I think you need to concentrate on having all the same points one after the other. Your rhymes are great and your flow is good. Your sad poetry is very creative, and it's good to see you writting different genres. You definitely have a lot of potential to be a better writer. So keep doing what you are doing.

  • Normal is the Watchword
    19 years ago

    Winter Solstice Blackouts
    A butterfly effect

    lol boy do I still owe people comments

  • Natalie
    19 years ago

    I'm Darien's sisterrrr. ;P Taha!

    I'm the only one related to himmmm. Nerrrrr. *sticks tongue out*

  • ASPHYXIATED
    19 years ago

    I'm not on for long so I'll do one [:

    •Please do ; Her Pretty Box & Imperfectly Painted By Numbers.

    Mkay, Thank yoo =)

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Debbie:

    It has been a while since I've read some of your poetry! What I can say but amazing work. You had different genres of poems, and all of them were down so well. The one I spoke of that dealt with philosophy was my favourite, simple yet so in depth. That is really amazing. I'm sure you didn't mean for it to come out that way, but it really did. You love poem was also very well done! Keep up the great work!

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Binksie! / Keeki!

    Well I doubt Nat would let me steal her nickname for you, but just in case, I put them both! lol, What can I say about your poetry that I haven't already said? Hmm, you are an excellent writer and your poetry has such an intellectual spunk to it. The vocabulary and the imagery, the description, it all flows so well. Awesome work!

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Lisa:

    Well, I have not read a lot of poetry from you, but you are a good writer. A few mistakes to patch up, but you really have some deep meanings in your poems. As a reader, it is really exciting creating your own meaning for a poem. It makes it all the more intersting, because another day, you can have a different meaning for it. So keep on writing.

  • Idiosyncratic
    19 years ago

    Done! If you could do:

    Happens
    Prelude to Extinction
    Fingerprints
    and Rest in Peace

    ...that'd be great-- thanks!

  • Darien
    19 years ago

    Erica:

    Your dark poems are really different from the ones I am use to. I really think you need to have more detailed imagery that catches people's attention, that makes them shake, or sick. But you do have really unique lines, I must admit that much. Add more gory images, that might spice up your dark poems.