Its my birthday, so please comment!

Lol, im 15 today. :)

Anyways i just wrote my first ever poem about nature. I want to improve my imagery and description and i thought nature peoms are good for that.
So please please tell me what you think! Its called "Snow Children!".

i will do it right now, and happy birthday!

Thanks!
Well, the poem was only my first try. "Practice makes perfect". Thanks for honesty!

Come on people,i wanna know what you think. Its the first time i wrote a poem that isnt sad! (Man you must think of me as a depressed person...)