Give Me Your Best

WINNERS AT BOTTOM.

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I'll judge this within the four-day weekend. Thank you for all the entries. =]

Simple as that. I want your best poem. Nothing less.

Rules:
1. I HATE friendship poems...But you can still post it if it's your best. (Remember, it's my opinion that counts here.)
2. Love is VERY hard to accomplish, but again, you can try.
3. No 500 lined poems (Seriously, keep it under 25)
4. No reserves, just post. If you don't make the first twenty, eh. If you reserve, I will not count it until you get your poem up.
5. When I say 'your best' it seems logical that would be one already written...for you never know how good or bad the next one will be.
5a. However, you CAN write a new peice. So, new or old.
Ends...Let's give it...Twenty people. Or one week. Whichever comes first.
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1. CharismaticCountryGirl
2.×мιѕѕ cιασ вєllα×
3.FlirtingWithDeath
4. *¤TheJohnston¤*
5.Ilinca Milosan
6.♥JeSS♥ ~Beautiful Mistake~
7.Symmetrically Unique
8.Gemma
9.DoDreamsReallyComeTrue?{Skippy S
10.Twisted Heart
11.Oscar
12. dhaval
13.Bryan
14. sharona
15.Italian Stallion
16. Emily
17. Bob Shank
18.RoadandtheRadio
19.No Need For A Name
20.~*Who Cares?*~
21. DarkPrincess© [Because she asked if she could enter a certain poem and I didn't get back to her before #20 entered. So, it is only fair. =]]
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Prizes:
1st: 5 comments/votes - 2 critics/votes
2nd: 4 comments/votes - 1 critics/votes
3rd: 3 comments/votes
4th: 2 comments/votes
5th: 1 comment/vote

Enjoy. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Blind Eyes

Cluttered thoughts and jumbled words
things unspoken things unheard
wish i could clear this canvas clean
start again and wipe the screen
my heart whispers to my mind
it causes me to walk eyes blind
i pray my mind is stronger now
to stop the wrong, and right allow
i've known the truth but it denied
not wanting it and choosing lies
but now it shines bright and true
I've chosen it through and through
the danger ends i've seen the signs
i no longer walk with eyes wide blind

By: Charisma
Normally my poems are much longer, but this is one of my favs. and one of my shorter ones.

Very nicely done, sweetie.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I should like to enter as well! =]

I'm Just A Poor Cinderella
by ×мιѕѕ cιασ вєllα×

I will never be his Cinderella but he'll always be my prince
I could never love another and I've never loved one since
How could I give up hope when that's all I could give
When I made him my everything our life, I chose to live

Don't make someone your everything, don't make him your all
Because what is there to catch you whenever you will fall
He will always be my everything, but I'll never be his
It's the love that we once had that will be forever missed

I see him now and then with his new princess
Somehow, they fit so perfectly, I guess
I wonder if he cares about this poor Cinderella
But how could anyone? Especially, this fella

I'm just some poor Cinderella, just some young girl
Who stupidly made some boy her whole entire world
So I guess I'll have to learn not to make that mistake again
Because my path in life is covered with "might-have-been's"

This poor Cinderella patiently waits for her prince
Who has maybe loved another, but hasn't loved one since.
Who will kiss away her troubles and off her feet, be swept
Who'll dry up all the fears and tears. that over the years, she's wept

One of the best... I couldn't really pick one... =]

Hm Love is a hard one huh...I will give it my best shot ;0

~A day of bliss~

Let's go chase butterflies
Into the nights sky,
Run with Fireflies
As if we could fly.

Swim with the fishes
In the glossy
Water world
Gallop with the horses
On the soft sandy shore.

Raise our hands
We have no fear
Let the rain poor on us
And was away our tears.

Our love is strong
We will soar high
Above the universe
Like two doves
We have become.

When sunlight awakens
And kiss us with her glow
Settle down in our
Cherry blossom bed
And listen to the morning song.

Broken Chains
by *¤TheJohnston¤*

With broken chains I'm bound,
Into this world of hate,
I see beyond the fears of all,
With useless appeals of fate,

Your judging lies and games,
In which I can't understand,
I've played with these thoughts,
And followed every command,

I'll Carry the weight of the world,
And keep what's left beneath me,
I'll Hide it from what it is,
So no one will truly see,

Just undo these chains,
I've broken for you,
What Locks me down,
I can't brake through,

Breathless and in pain,
I fight for what is true,
I'll Face this world forever,
To prove my love for you,

Although again I've lost,
In this place so profound,
All never feel for you
With these broken chains I'm bound.

Entangling beauty
by Ilinca Milosan

The sun was almost setting into a sky of fire
Her black eyes were gazing over her empire
As her servants built their web around trees,
Suffocating roses and alluring yellow bees.

Red lips deceivingly smiling, such beautiful grin,
Such a wonderful pale face to hide what’s within,
Stretching her arms and lying on the solid ground
She lurks in silence – to evil and mischief bound.

Looking at the dazzling sky as darkness falls
Her ears devour with satisfaction desperate calls
Of those trapped and entangled in her webs
As their breath is away taken and their body ebbs.

Such cruelty lies in her black forsaken heart,
But her marvelous beauty lures you in the dark -
Another foolish victim finds its end in her hands
As its screams shall remain unheard on these lands.

Hope you like it =)

darn I have to compete with Georgi again..... I love that poem hun!!

Fly, fly. Now is the time
Fly to where the stars all shine
Fly upon the gently breeze
Soar above the lakes and trees

Fly, fly. On winds of love
Fly beside the graceful dove
Fly away to the unknown
Always remember, your not alone

Fly, fly. Towards the sun
Fly, your journey has begun
Fly untroubled from the pain
No need to feel sadness again

Fly, fly. Spread your wings
Fly to where the angels sing
Fly away at your own pace
Your on course to a better place

Fly, fly. Your finally free
Fly across the land and sea
Fly, fly. Towards the light
Go now, the time is right

*Gem*

Behind my smiles
My past does lie
No one See's that
My eyes do cry

Behind my smiles
My pain doesn't show
If you only knew
That my tears do flow

Behind my smiles
My heart has been broken
If you can see the cracks
That's all that needs spoken

Behind my smiles
No one will ever see
That the girl who is showing
Isn't really me

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I chose this one coz i has the most votes n comments. Hope you like it

*¤TheJohnston¤* --

I said keep it under 25. You still may have a spot, but please post another...it's not fair letting you off with more than 25 and the others not. Thanks.

Everyone--
Nice job so far...Keep it up.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Decadent Soldiers
by Twisted Heart

Go forth ye soldiers, who sunshine craves
Upon the land strip mother earth
Plunder and rape the maiden, fair of face
With her blood and body, quench thy thirst.
Draw battle lines upon the ground
And feast ye upon thy brethren host
As clashing swords and victory sound
Spear thy son's and daughter's ghost.

Take heed thy lovers of the day
And draw a bath of bitter wine
Bathe the demons who has come to play
Among the heathens lost in time.
Slay Satan's foes with a single stance
And watch as fallen angels pray
Take thy victims sorrowed dance
And pull them crying into decay.

Seek not ye penance for thy deeds
Nor sift among the ashen purge
But praise the eyes of Satan's greed
And grasp the pungent wilted curse
Then hardened soldiers slink back into
The barren chaos, from which ye came
As festering maggots invade the tombs
Of soulless victims of the Devil's Reign.

My Guardian Angel
by Oscar

I stand here protected, as one guarded child.
I sit alone safely, where nothing is wild.
Never been in danger, never in harm's way.
and all of life's challenges, waited at bay.

i have always been happy, for I've never felt pain.
my angel stands by me through sun snow and rain.
she is always smiling. and a smile she receives.
she tricks enemies away, or is it me she deceives?

I have always been guarded, and so never in fear.
and I stay locked up always, year after year.
have not seen a human, for she said they are bad
and even though i am healthy, i remain sad.

have i been missing out, is there much more to life,
could i someday have children and maybe a wife?
I must see it for myself, no longer can i wait.
i must be fragile, for fear is a human trait.

i wanted the experience, yet she locked me in.
i tried to run away, but she will always win.
I'm stuck here forever, i cry through the night.
and for the first time ever, i am feeling fright.

so long's gone by now, i still am stuck here.
i now cry every night, for real life is so near.
but here i shall stay, until my final breath.
so is she My Guardian Angel, or my Angel of Death.

WINDS OF CHANGE

I’ve started smelling you in roses,
feeling you in the damp, dim evenings,
and seeing you in its lilac dew.

Meaning it was that I’d searched for,
and meaning it was, that you gave me.
This cold oil had never known
that there would come a day, when
your loving flame would kiss my lamp
and thaw my miseries away…
Now amidst your loving arms,
I am draped in peace, and a warmth
that I think my heart has grown addicted to…
The light illuminates, yet warns me,
and I can see the misty road just far enough
to tell me that it’s wise to be scared,
for reality is harsh, and the past tells me
that there are no hands of fate or circumstance
that do not believe in cruelty;
none that do not like lashing sand-castles
with their unrelenting waves of time.
Even a semblance of a parting is piercing
so if the winds of change ever cruelly blow,
and our time together is set in stone,
I know not what will remain of me…

But I’ll never stop smelling you in roses,
feeling you in the damp, dim evenings,
and seeing you in its lilac dew.

Because I can’t.

TIME TO MAKE YOU MINE

Some will say "how can i love you?"
i'll say "i always loved you"
i just never got the chance to show you.
it was never me you chose.
some will say,"i'm wrong"
but why does it has to be wrong?
when my heart is saying it's right.
some will say,"it will never last."
"not true",i'll say
once we're together,we know it will last.
you will tell that this is not a game
life is so real.
i'll say all
all that talk is in the past
now it's time to make the future.
now it's time to make you mine.

Oh no.
Im sorry... I Didnt realize how many lines we can have. So I Put in another one... 'Broken Chains.'
Sorry About that.

Goodluck everyone.

It is absolutely fine. =] I just have a short attention span...I can't sit still and judge all those poems if they are all 600 lines long...Understand? =] Thanks for reposting.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Ok, I would like to state this is not my best poem, but I'd like to enter it in your contest, for it is a poem I really enjoyed writting.

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The Photo of You
by Italian Stallion

Here I am
Sitting all alone
Staring at you
In these photos I have

Your Radiant smile
your soft tender lips
The happiness glows
From deep within

I wish it was real
The photo of you
I wish you where near
So I could touch your soft skin

I want to hold you close
And be able to call you my own
Give you a kiss
And say I love you so

You are the light
That shines down on me
When I am sad
And when I'm not

You are my life,
You mean the world
I love you darling
And can't wait
Till the day we meet

© Copyright 2006 By: Italian Stallion

In Your Arms

I was always the one who never took a chance
Even when my friends gave a knowing glance
And I never wanted to say what I felt
In case they turned on me and walked away

But then theres that one time when I bowed my head
And listened to the words that you lovingly said
Then I raised my hand, I took a stand
Now I'm yours, and you are mine

Chorus:
For you, you're all I need
For you, I want to breathe
Every chance that I get, I try to repent
Cause I want to be yours
Please take me into your arms, Lord

Whatever they may call you, a saint or a Jew
I promise to be faithful to only you
I know there will be times when I want to run
But you draw me in, and hold me close

When I turn my back on you, you're there for me
When I wander from your grace, you help me see
All the joys and the pleasures you want me to be
Cause I am yours, you are mine

Chorus

In your arms - where I long to be
When I fall you will catch and carry me
With you, I will never worry
With you, I'm safe in your hands - In Gods hands, where I want to be

i think that's 25 lines... hope its alright! and its ok if theyre lyrics too, right? because its still a poem... otherwise, i can put in a different one!
Emily

Emily--
Lyrics are fine, I guess. I don't prefer them, but I didn't specify they couldn't be lyrics, so you are just following the rules. I said post your best. You are fine. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Wildwood Flower

Beneath night I confide,
On sheets thin to hold ink,
Scrawled in minute stains.
Neglected wildwood flower,
Pale petals drawn into center,
Not knowing how long it lay,
Dying on torn sketchbook page,
Or when it first bloomed bright.

Beneath night I confide,
On mind chained, weighed down.
The cold air touching my lungs,
Freezing an out stretched hand,
Dropped into life’s empty pocket.
Blue lips whisper an icicle apology,
Swept into wind’s equal wail echo.
Alone waits I, pale wildwood flower.

Two more spots left.
I have Thanksgiving Break coming up in two days, so the contest will be judged by next Monday (most likely sooner).

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Silent Movie

You look as if you don't
Remember all the things of which you know
Does my heart still beat
Or does it drowned out that which bleeds

Broken promises
Is that all that I really miss
Can't tell when
I am alive and when I am dead

(Pre-Chorus)
It's black it's white it's gray inside
It's deafened ears is that of life

(Chorus)
Look closely this world is not picture perfect
Look closely my life is just a silent movie clip
Look closely and you'll see I'm losing my grip
Look closely at me and my silent movie

I walk down these streets
My footstep follow yours can't you hear it
Ignore the words I speak
Or are you just complete ignorant

Sky is darkened now
Or I am just looking at a cloud
It blends in so well
In the canvas of my hell

(Pre-Chorus)
It's black it's white it's gray inside
It's deafened ears is that of life

(Chorus)
Look closely this world is not picture perfect
Look closely my life is just a silent movie clip
Look closely and you'll see I'm losing my grip
Look closely at me and my silent movie

Scissors won't cut through
That blame lies directly on you
What now I ask
For me to finally remove the mask
Because of you it's there
And I can't repair, I can't repair

(Pre-Chorus)
It's black it's white it's gray inside
It's deafened ears is that of life

(Chorus)
Look closely this world is not picture perfect
Look closely my life is just a silent movie clip
Look closely and you'll see I'm losing my grip
Look closely at me and my silent movie

No.Need.For.A.Name.

Would you mind a Christmas Poem? *Smiles Sweetly*

Ghosts Don't Cry

Walking around, aimless, lost in the crowd.
Trying to be heard, but the noises are so loud.
After a long day, coming home to fights,
Not getting a word in edgewise; lonely nights.

Welcome to my life, I'm only a ghost,
Not noticed by many, ignored by most.
Often want to break down, and want to die,
Or cry my eyes out, but ghosts don't cry.

Finally a little freedom, out with friends,
But ignored by you, the pain never ends.
Love shown one way, yet hate the other,
Then the time comes to see my mother.

I see her only a little, yet important I'm not,
Complaining and yelling, making cheeks hot.
Talking to her boyfriend for an hour it seems,
Actually spending time with HER is just a dream.

Welcome to my life, a ghost I'll remain,
Many ignore me, many don't know my name.
Often I want to break down, but when I try,
I recall that one thing, ghosts don't cry.

Noni--
Go for it.. And since I like you, I'll wait a day or two since I can't judge this yet anyways.
As long as it is your best. (And it'll be hard to top Jaded Eyes!=]) Hurry, though, with the entry. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Thank You!

Christmas Beauty

The chandelier of heaven lights
Descend upon the waking night
Serenity plays upon winter bliss
Everything with love exists
Wake up children, morning sings
Spread your mind, spread your wings
The angels cheer with Christmas hymns
Waiting for laughter to begin

Look at those small almond eyes
Look how bright they seem to shine
Drinking in the perfect portrait
Of ruby red orbs on the tips
Of a large shimmering emerald tree
And the whiteness situated like a sea
Or like a carpet of small opal jewels
Still, silent and wondrously cool

Dig into your pool of presents
Embrace upon the warming scent
For once, enjoy the sweet emotions
And the yelling family commotion
For once, be thankful of the love
That God has sent from high above
And just remember now to cherish
For one day, those things will fade and perish

How My Contests Are Judged (So you know it's fair):

It is a simple process, but it takes some time, but IS the fairest I can think to judge a contest.

1. I have not read any of the poems in advance, so I have no idea who wrote what.

2. I copy and paste all poems into Word Document.

3. I take all names off the poems (By xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex things), so they are pure poems and nothing more.

4. I go through read, rate, and comment each poem of exactly what I think of it.

5. Then, I go through and put them in ranking order from best to worst to find 1st - 5th.

6. The people who win, win fairly and by having simply the best.

I Hope Everyone Agrees That Is Fair..

What I Look For:
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`Correct consistant spelling. [If one word is mispelled, it happens.]
`Correct grammar.
`Unquieness. [Is that a word? Lol.]

The Judging Begins.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

that sounds like a perfect way to do it! I shoulda thought of that! lol Good Luck everyone!!

Ciao xx

Great way of judging!

lol woot. fair judging:) good luck everyone:)

so excited to see the results. love the judging style!
Charisma*

I should do that too

Everyone --
I'm trying to get this done, but as soon as I do something comes up. I'm going to try my hardest to get it done today, but if I don't, I will sometime soon.
Thank you for the wait.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

np hun! don't worry about it
Ciao xx

And the Winners Are....
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I had to enclude these guys because I just loved the poems anyways and they were very close to placing. So, one comment for each of you.
Honorable Mention-
`Deception
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5th Place-
Winds of Change

This is a very low place for you, it should have been higher, but somehow the others just caught my eye. You really should be tied for at least third, but this is where you landed in my heart.
Now, this is a beautiful poem. The way it is written fits the type of poem extremely well. The imagery is beautiful as well...I'd be very proud of this piece if I wrote it. Wonderful job.

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4th Place-
Wildwood Flower

There is no wrong to this poem, in my opinion. You should be proud, if this is your best. It is wonderfully written and tells such a simple story. I know almost know one who could take such a simple object and display such emotion and care. Great job.
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3rd-
Framed

Complaints: I suggest to use more puncuation. It is only a suggestion, but it helps the reader know when to pause or go straight through. I found when I began to use puncuation many more understood them better, as well.
Praise: I simply loved the word useage here. You have a strong vocabulary, which is important for a poet. Now, the topic is simply amazing. Such a way to describe sanity! I loved it. Great job.
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2nd-
Entangling Beauty

Complaint: I also would suggest using punctuation here as well.
Praise: Very nice use of words. A dazzling picture you provided for me on this poem. I'm not sure what else to say, I'm at loss for words of such beauty.
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AND
1st-
Decadent Solider

Praise: This poem is simply dumbfouding amazing. The words fit perfectly to the style of the poem.
The topic isn't cliche and is exactly my type of writing. The rhyiming wasn't too cliche, but flowed very nicely. And the ending was perfect. Over-all, it is a very, very well written poem. You should be proud this is your best. Great job.
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Everyone else--
It was very hard to pick these winners. Most of these poems were very well written, but someone had to win. I congradulate all of you for producing some wonderful poetry. Good job.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I look forward to reading more of the winners' poems! Please leave the correct number of titles and or critics as well.

Thank you for the suggestion on punctuation and also thank you for choosing me for second place, I appreciate it ^^
Congrats to everyone else as well! *hug*

As for the poems, I would like if you could comment on these ones:
01. Chrysanthemums scent
02. A place in Heaven for the Fallen
03. Red roses... raven feathers
04. Lacrymosa

And if you could critique on this one:
01. Red roses and violins

--- You can find them all in my featured poems. I would appreciate it if you weren't too harsh with your comments/critiques. Thank you =)

That was a d-mn lot to read. But very nicely written. I knew I'd enjoy your work. Hope I didn't offend you.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

You can pick any ofmine that you haven't read yet

congrats winners!!!

Ciao xx