My Own Poetry form

could some one please read my newest poem.. id be really gratefull. its not completely done and prolly will never be. but it menas alot to me. i created the form.. and i wrote the poem on something very personal.. ill rrc up to 4 depending on if you actually write something in your comment. if you write a one liner, ill do one right back.

please? and dont just tell me its a five and great jjob tell me whats wrong with it.

the poems called fall to pieces..
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=792911

x.x:Lauren.. =/

haha i just did. haha on the other post. xD

i think we're EOP-geeks.. haha

Pulease people. i need it too be done. by like erm. today.. -ahem-

*cries* its finished now. please? it still needs improvement.

Pssh. you ppl should do this comone 1-for 2/3/ or 4!!!

Aaaaaaanymore?

Please.??

It's Worth it. =]