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When I'm around you
I can't think about nothing else,
Besides the feelings you make me feel,
Every time you hold your gaze with mine,
I seem to feel this great feel rush through my body,
Eyes get watery,
Shivers run through my whole body,
And I seem to become warmer,
The feeling is unbelievable,
And whenever you not around,
I miss you,
And when we leave each other, you always leave me wanting more,
And I love that you know what imp saying with out saying anything at all,
I love the way you make me smile,
And the way you say you don't like me,
But every one knows you do,
Maybe these feelings are pure lust,
But what I know,
Is that I have these feelings,
And if I would get to know you more
I know I'll like you even more
In way I feel we have this special bond
That's only between the Two of us
You have this mysterious thing about you,
That I love oh so much
And I hope one day Babe we'll be together as one
And to able to hold your hand
And grow old with you
And you'd kiss me under that stars, and even when its pouring rain is
Because I know our love would be unbendable
And I'd never hurt you
Id be there for you till eternity
I'll tell yah Babe Just give me one chance,
And I'll make your world go around,
Ill make you the happiest you've ever been
The feelings I have for you are so real and pure
I love you, Babe

you want us to comment on here?..

odd but okay. lol

2nd line- can not cant, or change nothing to anything.. its a double negative..
i'd-id
And you'd kiss me under that stars, and even when its pouring rain is(is? huh?)

Other than that grammatically it is fine

but it did .not. flow well. it needed more breaks on the long lines. and /seemed/ like a runon in many places.. btw it seemed as if you said 'seem' alot. even though you didnt really. try using different verbs and adjectives.

overall not a wonderful poem.. but not bad either. you have potential. so keep writing.
-i suggest you reread your own poems outloud.. it will help you find some errors. when you do this read whats written! i often find my self saying other things.. so i add them lol.

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