Paradelle Contest (Gather all your talent)

Okay, my second contest! And it's quite a difficult one in my opinion so bare with me, lol.

I would like you to write a Paradelle.
This is more of a word puzzle than any other poem and is a difficult format to master.
A paradelle is a repetition of lines with each stanza ending in two lines which use all the words in the previous lines.
Also the very last stanza uses ALL the words from all previous stanzas.
Here's an example so you know what i mean..

Xx Winter xX

Night is cold and lonely
Night is cold and lonely
Still the tempest does turn
Still the tempest does turn
Cold tempest is still night
and turn does the lonely.

Sparkles of ice glitter
Sparkles of ice glitter
Cloudy breath floats away
Cloudy breath floats away
Breath of cloudy sparkles
away ice breath glitter.

Winter brings it's caress
Winter brings it's caress
Delight rewards the soul
Delight rewards the soul
Winter rewards delight
it's soul brings the caress.

Winter glitter sparkles
and tempest floats away
it's cloudy soul does turn
the ice of lonely night
caress is the rewards
still breath brings cold delight.

©1999 Wordsmith

You can reserve spots if you want and pick your own title and subject. Only 10 spots available though so hurry.

The rules are:
- One poem per person
- Newly written
- Try to keep profanity and swearing to a minimum

Prizes:
1st place - 4 comments and votes
2nd place - 3 comments and votes
3rd place - 2 comments and votes
Everyone else - 1 comment and vote

(You can say what poems you would like commented/voted)

1) Reserved - [Baby]Blue[Baby]Blanky
2) Reserved - Lush.Fcuk-*
3) Done - CharismaticCountryGirl
4) Done - Ilinca Milosan
5) Done - Bryan
6) Reserved - ♥JeSS♥ ~Beautiful Mistake~
7) Done - RoadandtheRadio
8) Done - Italian Stallion
9) Done - DarkDesire©
10)

*The closing date will be end of December*

Good luck cos this may be quite difficult, have fun!

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/nature/poems.php?id=806722

Here's one I've just done if you need more examples...

Good luck

reserve me a place please :)
i will write it at home in the next 2 days.

-/2 Terra

lol I didn't know you were the one holding this contest! heehee...i was thinking you were just entering it. HAHAHAHA well, for the fun of it, I'll try it, but if I have to unreserve please don't be too upset. But I don't think I will, but miracles may not happen with this one!
hahaha
Charisma*

Please reserve me a spot, I will give it a try.

-Jenna.

Ok, this was so hard, but so fun. I did actually like it once I got into it!!! Cool contest!

Grey Moon Skies

Rain pouring down on me
Rain pouring down on me
Calming my restless thoughts
Calming my restless thoughts
Restless thoughts pouring on
My rain calming me down

Thunder shakes the damp ground
Thunder shakes the damp ground
Lightning brightens grey skies
Lightning brightens grey skies
Lightning brightens thunder
Ground shakes the damp grey skies

Winds cool the darkened moon
Winds cool the darkened moon
Forest speaks and rustles
Forest speaks and rustles
Darkened forest rustles
And the cool moon winds speak

Darkened lightning brightens
Thunder speaks calming thoughts
Cool rain rustles the ground
My restless forest shakes
The grey moon skies and winds
Pouring damp down on me

By: Charisma*

Cool, it got a response.
The poems are graded by a panel of 6 judges. Me, two other poets on here and three people from my english class so you are being graded by people who know what they are reading =)
Good luck everyone, 7 spots left.
*Gem* x

I would like to reserve a spot, but don't be upset if I have to unreserve XD since this is pretty difficult. Heh, I'll try to come up with something that's hopefully good.
Thank you! =)

P.S.: I have noticed that the poem posted has 6 syllables in each verse so I'm thinking that's how it should be, right? I hope I'm right otherwise I'd have to re-do my poem X.x

Untitled [ paradelle ]

White roses on her bed
White roses on her bed
Silver petals of light
Silver petals of light
Her bed of white petals
Light on silver roses.

Sweet rays of delight shine
Sweet rays of delight shine
Diamond drops pouring down
Diamond drops pouring down
Sweet drops of delight shine
Pouring down rays of diamond.

Life sparkling in her eyes
Life sparkling in her eyes
The graceful beauty seen
The graceful beauty seen
Beauty seen in her eyes
The graceful life sparkling.

Rays of diamond sparkling
Graceful light on her bed,
Life in her sweet eyes seen
Pouring down the roses -
Silver petals of white
Shine delight - beauty drops.

Phew this was a hard one =D
Heh, didn't come out so good, but it was fun trying XD
Thanks for the challenge ^^
Hope you likey a bit! =)

reserve me please

Ooh this sounds really fun...i probably wont finish cuz im going to be busy all week cuz my birthday and christmas is only days away so i may not finish...plz dont smite me almighty smitah lmao...

i guess i'll give it a go

edit: i just tried it twice...nothing good was result of...so...i dunno if im going to enter this...but i still might come up with something...just keep me like...on a side note like....underneath the reserves list...if i come up with anything and theres a spot left i'll post if not then i guess i wont

Hehe, don't worry people, i might keep it open until January yet.
And the syllable count can be what you want =)

*signs up*

I'd like to reserve a spot please.

Thank you, Joe

Romance Is The Very Essence Of Life (Paradelle)
by Italian Stallion

Romance is the very essence of life
Romance is the very essence of life
Without it the world would go insane
Without it the world would go insane
It maybe hard for some to explain
But in the end we must all obtain

Such a love that is oh so real
Such a love that is oh so real
Making it feel just so surreal
Making it feel just so surreal
By the way we touch and caress
As we both begin to undress

Feeling your warmth by my side
Feeling your warmth by my side
And the soft tender touch of your lips
And the soft tender touch of your lips
As they strike mine
We begin to entwine

A romance such as that, must be hard to obtain and explain
But in the end, we will all feel the essence love has upon life
For without it some may go insane maybe even feel that it is just oh so surreal
But by making the world begin to entwine in this feeling of warmth by your very touch
They would begin to realize that loving in such a way with soft and tender hearts will help both mine and your children
So stay by my side as you kiss me while we both undress and caress as we make progress in our romance

© Copyright 2006 By: Italian Stallion

I could be wrong, but Italian Stallion, your poem doesn't follow the rules lined out above. Is there more than one type of Paradelle?
Charisma*

ahh yes you are correct, thank you for pointing that out, I will fix it and repost it as soon as possible.

Peace, Joe

Ok, I hope I did it right this time....

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Romance Is The Very Essence Of Life (Paradelle)

Romance is the very essance of life
Romance is the very essance of life
Without it the world would go insane
Without it the world would go insane
Life without romance would be insane
For it's of essance in this very world

Such a love that is oh so real
Such a love that is oh so real
Making it feel just so surreal
Making it feel just so surreal
Is this love real or surreal
Well I feel we are making it oh so real

Feeling your warmth by my side
Feeling your warmth by my side
And the soft tender touch of your lips
And the soft tender touch of your lips
Feeling the warmth of your lips as they touch mine
While you lay your soft tender body by my side

Your love for me is it real or surreal?
This feeling is making me go insane
Without the warmth of your soft tender kiss
Without the extra essance you provide
My world would be deprived
Of the romance I once had

© Copyright 2006 By: Italian Stallion

ok. I so don't want anyone to hate me, specially you Italian Stallion, but in your last two lines in each one I believe it can be made up of ONLY the letters in your previous two repetitive lines...Not sure...maybe Gem can tell you. Sorry if I'm wrong...
Charisma*

RESERVE FOR ME!!

Yeah, you kinda have to use all the words in the last stanza with only a few added in but only if they are really needed.. =/ At least thats what i read about them.

So is mine ok or not?

I think you may have used a little to many words in your ending couplets that aren't in the previous lines..
You can keep it like that if you want, we have six judges so we'll all be looking at different things.
x

ok, so I really want to get it right, so I fixed it again, please tell me if I did it right this time, because I love learning about new styles and doing them correct.

Peace, Joe

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Romance Is The Very Essance Of Life (Paradelle)

Romance is the very essance of life
Romance is the very essance of life
Without it the world would go insane
Without it the world would go insane
The world without romance
Is a world without life

Such a love that is oh so real
Such a love that is oh so real
Making it feel just so surreal
Making it feel just so surreal
Love is so surreal
Just making it so real

Feeling your warmth by my side
Feeling your warmth by my side
And the soft tender touch of your lips
And the soft tender touch of your lips
Your soft warmth and your tender touch
By my side, the touch of lips

Your love is making my life insane
Is it real or is it surreal?
Your tender lips, without my soft touch
Your warmth without feeling romance
Your love life is insane
So is your love real or surreal?

© Copyright 2006 By: Italian Stallion

Perfect. You should be really proud of yourself =)

In My Shelter

I sleep the day in night shadows
I sleep the day in night shadows
Entangled in my shattered heart
Entangled in my shattered heart
Night Shadows sleep in my heart
Entangled I shattered the day

Beneath the fallen darkened sky
Beneath the fallen darkened sky
Rain quenches my sinner thirst
Rain quenches my sinner thirst
Fallen rain darkened beneath the
Sinner sky quenches my thirst

On dirt mound land I drown alone
On dirt mound land I drown alone
White flower tucked deep in my hair
White flower tucked deep in my hair
White flower tucked deep in mound
On dirt land I drown my hair alone

Entangled white flower tucked deep
Beneath fallen sinner night rain
On dirt mound land shattered alone
Heart shadows darkened in my sleep
I drown my hair in the sky
The day quenches my thirst

After twilight songs emerge
After twilight songs emerge
After rainfall angels sing
After rainfall angels sing
twilight emerge after angels
Songs sing after rainfall

Underneath a cloud of dreams
Underneath a cloud of dreams
My spirit hums a melody
My spirit hums a melody
A cloud underneath a melody
My spirit hums of dreams

Silence paints it's remedy
Silence paints it's remedy
In copper colored mist
in copper colored mist
Copper paints colored mist
It's remedy in silence

My spirit sing songs of twilight
It's remedy, a cloud of dreams
Melody in colored silence
After rainfall angels emerge
Underneath copper colored paint
My songs hum in silence

My Soul Cries Blackened Tears (Paradelle)
by Bryan

How long can my heart endure such pain,
How long can my heart endure such pain.
Guilt and shame that will forever remain,
Guilt and shame that will forever remain.
Slowly I'm dying and I know I wont be the same,
Same way I'm dying from the guilt and the shame.

Trying to survive, but I don't know how long,
Trying to survive, but I don't know how long.
I can live without you, I'm trying to be strong,
I can live without you, I'm trying to be strong.
Sometimes I'm wrong, but one thing is true,
Surviving is wrong, when its without you.

With this final note, my soul dies with fear,
With this final note, my soul dies with fear.
My heart cries from its loss with blackened tears,
My heart cries from its loss with blackened tears.
You don't know it, but your love is killing me,
But my soul cries for you for an eternity.

I must endure it, even if it means ill die,
My heart and soul will have to live through the goodbyes
And my guilt and shame will soon die too,
So now I can make it, even if it means without you,
My blackened tears will soon turn back clear,
With this final note, there wont be no more tears.

took me 10 minutes to get the last part.

^^ nice job !! =D

♥ Miss Ciao

thanx!!

Great job everyone. Remember reserves, the end of December. =)
*Gem*

i forget if i told u or not but i cant do this so...i think i'll drop out sorry

-Edit-

Edit?

since mine isnt right, ill do another one, sorry.

Oh no, don't apologise!
you should have seen my first attempt at one!
What a massacre! >_<

There's still one spot left if anyone wants to have go and we're nearing the end of December so can the reserves all do it in time?
*Gem*

What She Looks Like (Paradelle)

Her eyes are blue waterfalls
Her eyes are blue waterfalls
Sparkling downward fall tears
Sparkling downward fall tears
Her eyes are sparkling waterfalls
Downward fall blue tears

Her hair soft, spun gold
Her hair soft, spun gold
A shining sun
A shining sun
Her hair a sun,
Shining soft, spun gold

Her lips a velvet blanket
Her lips a velvet blanket
She makes an enchanting kiss of death
She makes an enchanting kiss of death
Her kiss of an enchanting velvet
She makes lips a death blanket

Sparkling lips, an enchanting velvet blanket
She makes blue spun gold
Her eyes, her hair, a sun
Her fall a kiss downward
Death shining soft, her
Waterfalls are of tears

Just wondering when this will be judged?
Charisma*

OMG! It didn't get the deleted! I couldn't find this page for ages!
I have the results on the computer at college so when i have my next computing lesson, i'll post em here =)
Thanks for finding it Charisma =)
*Gem*