Of Who Would I Dream?

My new poem..
My finacee and I broke up...as you can imagine, I'm devasted..So, I wrote this for him. Please comment if you can, and if not vote...and tell me here what you think/how to make it better.
It'd be much appreciated. Thank you.

And comments will be returned.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I thought you left, loser. =[[
I love you, too. Thanks for everything... I hope you like it.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Send me one, if you want to. I'll be here awhile. =]

And thanks for the comment.. I love hearing from you. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

im done, another masterpiece, and im sorry about your fiance, but its a very good poem, loved it. p.s. i think it would sound a little better if you change the last sentence from (is) to (has).

[Smiles] Thank you, Bryan.
What poems would you both like done? You and Jess?

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

umm, My Soul Cries Blackened Tears is ok. your welcome, i enjoy reading your poems.

I'm sorry, I can't comment love poems.. But, I rated it, if that counts.
I loved it, though. It seems a little repetative in some areas with the same word, though. Otherwise, flawless.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

thanx, it was a paradelle but i changed it back to a regular poem.

Never the fan of a paradelle...But still, a very good poem.
Would you like me to comment on another?

its ok, u dont have to, thanx though.

I read your poem I think you did a great job on it.