Love, Pain, Tears (Triple Tetractys)

I have written Tetractys before and also a reversed tetractys and i decided that i'd try something trickier so here it is
"Love, Pain, Tears (Triple Tetractys)"

I'd love HONEST comments on this poem.
Thank you in advance

I WILL RETURN THE FAVOUR ASAP
PLEASE LEAVE A TITLE OR 2

(The poem has been edited due to a structural mistake) Keep reading

Much love, Tara-Kay

Comment completed. =]

You don't have to comment any of my poem's if you don't want. But if you do I'll leave two titles for you.

Anymore
An End Sealed With A Kiss.

Thankssss!

Tammie ♥

Hey Tammie, I commented both of the poems because i love your work, a pleasure to read as usual
Thanks for yuur comment, I edited the poem to fit the structure, i had an idea it was wrong.

Anyone else?

Any takers?