honest opinions

Hey guys, I haven't gotten any comments on any of my poems in a while...and I was just wondering if any ofyou are bored could you give me some honest opinions and mayb tips to make stuff better?
i'd really appreciate it...and not sumthing just like "good job 5/5" i'd also like to know why you like it or not...

Thanks alot, and all comments will be returned...

xxDeLie

^^i've already posted this in OTHERS... :S