Would appreciate a big favour...

I have just revised and updated a poem of mine quite a bit and would like thoughts on the new version.
The poem is called Even The Furniture Bleeds, and the original is still posted under that title. I've just posted the new version under Even The Furniture Bleeds (edited).
I would appreciate any comments and feedback on the changes and also if I should make anymore.
The poem uses many metaphors to portray the message, and this was the primary focus of my rewrite.
If you are having trouble understanding any part, don't be afraid to say, and I'll try and explain the meaning, as I realise not everyone is used to reading metaphorical poetry.

Thanks for the favour in advance.

Oh and I'll return any "real" comments (real means any that are genuine and more than a few words long, you should know what I mean).

Please, anyone?