Blood and Ribbons

Hi there!!

I posted the original poem "Blood and Ribbons" a couple of days ago. Since then I've edited it in a few places. I've posted the edited version under "Blood and Ribbons (second edit)." Both poems can be found in my featured.
The reason I have seperate posts is because the site won't let me edit a prevously posted poem.

So, if you could let me know what you think of the changes, it would be deeply appreciated.

Thanks.

Of course your favour will be rewarded with a comment on the poem/s of your choice.

Thanks.

Silver J
i already commented on it, and it was incredible! Great job dear.

:o there is an edited version?

I've read both versions, and r/r/c'd the edited one. Excellent work.

Could you please r/r/c "Dark Blue" for me?

Thank you.

Yes yellowfeverlime, there is an edited version.

i shall check it out and comment on that one as well. Where in the world do you come up with YOUR ideas?? People wonder how i come up with mine but mine are nothing compared to yours!? Anyway, so i shall do so...
I'm curious to find what needed to be edited... it seemed flawless.
Hmmm...

Didn't really see much of a difference. I commented though. :)

Lol it was only a couple of word alterations and additions/subtractions of lines.
But I felt better for the edit.

I would like to know the answer to that question myself...I have no idea. I ususally hear a few words or something happens in my life and it goes from there. I came up with this idea from a saucepan advert; it said "many years ago..."

Furthermore, after your comment I've edited again. Only deleting "(and gist)" though.
Anyway I've deleted the edited version and posted it again under "Blood and Ribbons (second edit)."

Anyone please feel free to read.

Thanks.

Anyone?